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Our Footprints...
Contributed by
moses
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Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 07:06:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Desolate cries carry with the wind.
Gravity crippled your souls flight.
Such terrific simplistic beauty,
you compliment the coming night so well.
We take the risk,
a road we've both taken before.
Just you-I want no more.
We slip off our shoes.
We made our mark,
short term nonetheless
but footprints we left just like our pasts.
Your hand I grasp,
the dark's crisp kiss brushes against your skin.
We shed our chains,
and we laugh as the ocean laps
up on our feet.
Forgetting it all, including time,
we embrace and the plantes align.
A crack, a sharp sound knocking me
into reality, where only your photo lays before me.
So faded now, with only a scribbled note
painted on the back.
No more do we laugh,
I can't seem to forget the past.
Your smile triggers so much,
exposing memories I've tried to leave- unlike our footprints-
untouched.
Copyright ©
moses
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2006-02-27 19:06:25]
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by crazy on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 07:13:33 PM AEST
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one i love abstract poetry.
2end this is so unique.
3rd i love how it tells a story of the past present and near future(i think)
i cant say anything else because im afraid i will not do your poem justice.terrific job |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by themonk on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 07:36:51 PM AEST
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woot woot! beatiful turley beautiful, i wish i was the one ur planets aligned wiht lol jk. nasty write man , one of ur top 5 i must say.
"the Monk" |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 10:32:32 PM AEST
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You know how you say, you get tears reading beautiful poetry, how about a real outburst of cries.. warm face, the chest feels heaving.. way out there.. hair stands on end.. no time for my throat to get a lump .. making ready for the tears.. instant tears.. treasures tears ... seeing what is left.. well, I don't want to break down over your poem, lets just say.. thank you for its creation.. well, call me a nut.. silly goose.. but when I go to the ocean and make prints on the wet sand, I wait long enough for the tide to come in, wash them away.. take them out to sea.. is that crazy.. to wash my prints away before my eyes.. the only footprints I want to be kept here after I leave.. is the prints I may have made onto others hearts..
raquel Leah |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 12:47:05 AM AEST
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Beautiful work. Different perhaps, but it shows excellent use of language, not too complicated but eloquent.
Well done.
Andrew |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by Gothchyk on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 01:22:32 AM AEST
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| this is beauiful, i loved it, Amazing job |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 05:19:29 PM AEST
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My sweet friend ~*Moses*~
Your poem touched me in a way I can't explain. You have such a flare with a pen. I have become a real fan of ur work. Always captivating and well worth the read. I'm glad I ventured to ur pages. Thank you for all the wonderful writes you have given us the pleasure of reading.
No more do we laugh,
I can't seem to forget the past.
Your smile triggers so much,
exposing memories I've tried to leave- unlike our footprints-
untouched.
A remarkable piece of poetry penned by a very talented and gifted poet. Shine on my dear friend, ~*Moses*~
*warm hugs*
~*sue*~ |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 2nd March 2006 @ 08:34:19 PM AEST
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Absolutely beautiful.....
A work of art here!!
Jenni |
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Re: Our Footprints...
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 07:11:13 PM AEST
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Oh my. How wonderful of you to drop by my page and lead me
straight to this amazing masterpiece !!
I love the enchantment that has been woven here and even in
the ending, there is much beauty. Sad, but still a soft allurement
surrounds the heart.
Exquisite work moses!
~Breezy |
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