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My Love
Contributed by
thesinner
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Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 11:38:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Come to me my love
and let me comfort you
for my love is endless and all consuming.
It is untethered by time and selfishness.
Lay with me my love
and let me warm you
for my passion is pure and real
unfettered by idealism and modesty
Let our bodies fulfill our desires
and block out this cold world.
Let me love you,
and know a love that trancends all things,
that makes the heavens fall in its envy,
the seas roar in its jealousies,
and the mountains crumble at our feet.
And we will know a love that is ours alone.
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Re: My Love
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by lovebug on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 11:59:05 AM AEST
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GOOD POEM YOU HAVE A VERY GOOD THING GOING ON HERE KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.
YOUR FRIEND:
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Re: My Love
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by Jackee_line on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 12:05:41 PM AEST
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| beautifully written. |
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Re: My Love
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by Ramfire on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 03:37:55 PM AEST
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| Your poems has captured the beauty that can be love. It can be all that you've said. Well written. |
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Re: My Love
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by eggflipper on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 08:48:23 PM AEST
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| Wonderful. |
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Re: My Love
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 10:23:38 PM AEST
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This is well expressed. I would have chosen slightly different sentence structures in some of the lines, such as using "with" rather than "in its" in lines 3 and 4 of the last stanza, to make it clear that the envy and jealousy belong to the the heavens and the seas. But, other than that sort of thing, this is fine, flowing and worthy of its subject. Keep at it.
Andrew |
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Re: My Love
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 10:46:01 PM AEST
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wonderful wonderful.. applaud..*********** such unconditional love at its best..
raquelLeah |
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Re: My Love
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by mickie on
Wednesday, 15th March 2006 @ 01:52:40 PM AEST
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I love this poem. Puts me in mind about the kind of stuff that I write from time to time.
i hope thigns are good with you.
keep in touch, ok? |
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