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Complete Tradgedy
Contributed by
Ineedanap
on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 08:42:06 PM in AEST
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It's like watching a car crash
Right before your eyes
You see it coming at you
And you sit there wondering why
You can't say anything
You can't even scream
You just sit there waiting for it to happen
Hoping that you don't feel a thing
You close your eyes
Letting the memories play
A slideshow of melodious pictures
Slowly starting to fade away
As the clock slowly starts to wind down
You take ahold of the wheel
Swerving to the right of the road
Listening to your tires squeal
You say one final prayer
And make your last plea
You only hope this will not end
In a complete Tradgedy
Copyright ©
Ineedanap
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2006-02-26 20:42:06]
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Re: Complete Tradgedy
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by twick on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 08:51:24 PM AEST
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| I think there were some good elements but it seems a bit ordinary. Never stop writing and good luck. |
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Re: Complete Tradgedy
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by drtylilsecret on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 08:52:05 PM AEST
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great poem, really honest
i hope it all works out for you
~natalya |
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Re: Complete Tradgedy
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by R0b on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 08:58:43 PM AEST
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| Hey I really like this poem. Youre right about how it can apply to many other things, I like poems like that. Broad meanings, let the reader take it how they want to. Good job. And Im sry about your relationship. Hope it all works out. :) |
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Re: Complete Tradgedy
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by secretwind on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 12:21:11 AM AEST
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| like the way you paint a picture as you flow... |
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Re: Complete Tradgedy
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by purplestary on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 11:22:30 PM AEST
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| first before i forget...i do not agree with twick..i do not see it as ordinary...i think your words in this flow smoothly, and that the emotion is nice and clear. i love it. |
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