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MY poem you!!!^_^
Contributed by
butterflygirl40
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Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 10:05:21 AM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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When I seem different to you it's cause of the untrue and the undo words.
But I try to make myself true and not untrue to my words.
You are just like Andrew and he makes his words so untrue.
I don't want to undo what is said to make myself true to you.
So I went and unscrew the doorknob and told you that I wanted a bamboo.
You have blew all the words out and didn't see my point of view.
You are You and I am me so What makes it so different.
I don't want to argue over who is untrue and who is true.
I value my time and what is true and not untrue.
There is always two things in life the true and the untrue.
You should value the time you have and not argue over what is true and untrue.
Let's not argue and say what is true.
You should not try to undo and unscrew things up.
Value what time you have and make life true to the best of your knowledge.
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Re: MY poem you!!!^_^
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by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 10:08:29 AM AEST
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| well done , a joy to read. |
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Re: MY poem you!!!^_^
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 10:15:07 AM AEST
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A fantastic opening couplet! This was a well written and seemingly well thought out piece. A good job all around!
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Re: MY poem you!!!^_^
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 09:11:15 PM AEST
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You should not try to undo and unscrew things up.
Value what time you have and make life true to the best of your knowledge.
Yes, if its not broken, do not fix it.. great message..
I like the doorknob, replaced with bamboo.. might get Poked trying to leave lol.. your right, unscrew that knob, and put in the bamboo, stick him to his truths..
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Re: MY poem you!!!^_^
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 10:04:10 AM AEST
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RFLOL! Are you kiding me Gusto?!???!!!
Yes I agree BAMBOO just ruined this work! It was as distastefully unartistic as urinating on the Mona Lisa letting it dry and having cimps toss dung at each other while dancing upon it.
That is one of the most ridiculous bits of criticism I have ever heard. Come on Gusto, what would have been wrong had she not used bamboo. Oh I know!
You used the word untrue an unpoetic amount of times. When used multiple times, you can only use a single noun, adjective, verb, or adverb twice the sum of six times the amount of lines plus half of the amount of stanzas and minus whatever Gusto thinks.
GREAT JOB here Butterfly! |
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