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I Had a Dream of Sparrows
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 03:56:05 AM in AEST
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I had a dream of sparrows
four sparrows in the night
they called to me in silence
in dim and fleeting light
Their song, an ancient fable
a tale of death and woe
I had dream of sparrows
last four nights in a row
I had a dream of sparrows
four sparrows on my bed
They spoke of pain and anguish
Their words swirled in my head
and ripped my soul asunder
to die in dark and gloom
I had a dream of sparrows
four sparrows in my room
I had a dream of sparrows
four sparrows at the door
Who asked if they might enter
I tried to just ignore
their never ending knocking
yet fell beneath their spell
I had a dream of sparrows
Four sparrows sent from hell
I had a dream of sparrows
four sparrows with red eyes
that glared at me unceasing
and tempted me with lies
These black and soulless creatures
A gaze that chilled the bone
I had a dream of sparrows
four sparrows all alone
I had a dream of sparrows
Or have I lost my mind?
The end result of torment
and guilt thought left behind
As past becomes the present
I hang my head to pray
I had a dream of sparrows
God make them go away
L. Carling c2006
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Rakerman1999
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 04:01:36 AM AEST
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oooo i really love this kinda creepy yet exciting or should i say scary hehehe.
lol just ignore me i am kinda in a strange mood tonight.anyways awsome write |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 04:02:30 AM AEST
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Repetition of the first line of each stanza makes this very song-like. It's almost... like anger turning into fear at the end - or terror like. Extremely well done.
Was about to log out, but I had to stop for this one...
Blessings, J. |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 04:04:46 AM AEST
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~*Larry*~
A dynamic, mind blowing and provoking piece of poetry penned brilliantly by the true poetic master. I'm glad I ventured to ur pages dearest ~*Larry*~ for I'm so impressed with its contents as always. May ur pen never dry from delivering such brilliant poetic masterpieces.
*warm hugs*
~*sue*~ |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by NoSaint on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 08:27:12 AM AEST
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well written ominous although I never before thought of sparrows like that...now I will look a the little creatures differently...
Shari |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 08:32:09 AM AEST
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| Very deep and thoguht provoking write. You never cease to amaze..........Mike |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by crazy on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 12:40:40 PM AEST
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| very nice write i dont know hat else to say but great job |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by shelby on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 04:23:52 PM AEST
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woawwwww Larry, intense and rich with depth and feeling. Im so happy that you posted something, have missed you very much!! I agree with Shari I never thought of them this way.
Huggers and petals
Michelle |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 10:30:54 AM AEST
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See amazing how you come up with the thoughts for a poem. How are you Mr rose man. I have sure missed you the way you make me feel reading your writes simply divine.
Many petals for you
Love Angelxx |
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Re: I Had a Dream of Sparrows
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by Spike on
Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 12:06:30 AM AEST
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Larry, grief, bereavement, guilt and anger, tend to be stronger when our defences are down, as in sleep. Persisting dreams are even more unsettling. Children revisit us in the strangest of projections,but if I'm off the mark I would have to say I'm relieved for you. Anyway, an interesting journey you have taken me on with this one.
S |
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