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no title yet, need help on that one!
Contributed by
tanna
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Wednesday, 29th January 2003 @ 12:00:00 AM in AEST
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LovePoetry
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My heart belongs to you
Forever and a day
These words I pledge to you
As our vows , we say
The union of two lives
Combining to become one
A happy future beckons us
Tomorrow has just begun
So gently cradle my soul
I'll share my love with you
We'll walk this path together
And guide each other through.
Copyright ©
tanna
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2003-01-29 00:00:00]
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one!
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 29th January 2003 @ 06:03:20 AM AEST
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| this poem is very beautiful.. especially..thoughts expressed in last stanza.. Good luck..venkat |
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one!
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by LOWMAN613 on
Wednesday, 29th January 2003 @ 09:18:01 AM AEST
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| Tanna,not bad at all You did it! You could still add a line with their names in it, it will personalize the peice! I liked this though she will too! Christina |
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one!
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 30th January 2003 @ 12:03:47 AM AEST
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Beautiful... very well done, you asked for help so I'm giving my two cents again lol.. unless you do not agree with these words, I feel this smoother flow,
The union of two lives
Combining to be one
A happy future beckons us
Our lives have just begun,
love and hugs always Nessa
"Love, and health to all." ~Shakespeare~
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one!
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by Tanna on
Thursday, 30th January 2003 @ 12:52:26 AM AEST
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| Yup, I think you're right...thank you Nessa :) |
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one!
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by karoody on
Friday, 7th February 2003 @ 11:11:06 PM AEST
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| you are definitely on the right track...that is the sweetest thing you could do for them. |
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one!
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by riverofwords on
Saturday, 15th February 2003 @ 08:27:21 AM AEST
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hi tanna ...yuo did a good job on this
i agree that addig the names will personalise it....if this poem is what you want to say then dont change a thing ..if any doubt then rewrite it until i says want it to
any help just contact me ,be very happy to help ..dont think yuo will need it
hugs
yuor new friend
peace be yuor journey
terry
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