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Fairy Tale
Contributed by
poetryfreak13
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Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 07:11:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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She loves him.
He loves her.
Everybody’s Happy.
Like in a fairy tale.
Except me.
I stand on the sidelines.
Watching Helplessly.
Hoping.
Watching.
Wishing.
But for what?
Who do I put first?
Me
Or her?
My best friend,
Or myself.
Loved him forever.
He will
Never know.
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poetryfreak13
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2006-02-23 19:11:44]
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Re: Fairy Tale
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by drtylilsecret on
Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 10:13:03 PM AEST
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true story? well, though fairy tales have happy endings, it's only for the main characters, not us side-line-watchers.
good luck though =D
great poem if i didn't mention that yet
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Re: Fairy Tale
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by brokenwings on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 12:50:15 AM AEST
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| good write.. |
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Re: Fairy Tale
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 04:13:42 AM AEST
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I have read some of your other work, and it is pretty good. Here I have to say I was not all that impressed. I am not trying to insult you, but your talent far exceeds the boundaries you place here. If I had only read this poem, in all honesty I would not look your way anymore.
Please don't take this to heart, but you can do better than this, way better. I feel here you are just trying to force something out. The poem seems forced and way too simple, nothing really passionate or even artistic about this. This is just words about a subject which should have inspired much more!
Keep it up, you are a good poet. We all have our moments, where we stumble. If nobody points those moments out, we are doomed to repeat.
Keep Writing!
- SCM |
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Re: Fairy Tale
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by Drapes on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 10:31:07 PM AEST
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Wow, I like it. I know how you feel too.
Good luck to you!
-Drapes |
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