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closed eye vision strong

Contributed by lostrelic on Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 02:50:06 PM in AEST
Topic: abstract

solar eclipse a solid flash of my super nova mind
watching essence of dwindled time slowing from behind
a cosmic crash a substantial mark on my vision growing strong
seeing the chaos in the stars feeling this passage is wrong

like feeling empty this void of light a closure of cold fate
surrounding is my anger strong a comet of true hate
wanting fire set threw out this metacosm of my soul
but sucked back in this world of turmoil filling my black hole

a endless maze of endless days a map of useless haze
living in a faded view i live with out thought or faze
i flash back in my mind so soft i forget that past went threw
looking for another passage way i hope to go with you

Copyright © lostrelic ... [ 2006-02-20 14:50:06]
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Re: closed eye vision strong (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 04:56:54 PM AEST
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Relic, little bro, you know I am a fan of your writes. They are usually raw and full of an intenseness, that can't be denied. You have a few misspelled words, but the brilliance of some of your lines, overshadows that for me...

"solar eclipse a solid flash of my super nova mind
watching essence of dwindled time slowing from behind"

well, the whole first stanza was good.
Third stanza was powerful too....this line in particular, I liked.

"a endless maze of endless days a map of useless haze"

Thanks for sharing, Peace to you, Laura

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