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The Volcano
Contributed by
Willofree
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Sunday, 19th February 2006 @ 02:21:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Feelings
Simmering
Boiling inside
About to overflow
Only, who is responsible
Angry as hell at what transpired
Hard to control when so intensified
A look, an interpretation, and blame
I stand there mesmerized, frozen and unable to move
Legs trembling and unsteady, and still not able to maneuver
Like a lifeless sculpture forever bound to present shape and form
It is terrible living with this fear, complicated by a lack of understanding
There must be something I can do to turn things around, to change
I can't keep going on forever, full of rage, and final retribution
There has got to be a better explanation why this occurred
I'm needing some type of final resolution, this is absurd
Bottled up emotion is going to explode some day
She was my wife until he came along that day
Then my life fell apart and broke my heart
Yet this anger within is tearing me apart
I could see about a change of heart
The old one is about wore out
So it's up to me to change
This was my first wife
That led to misery
My present life,
Second wife
And me
Copyright ©
Willofree
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2006-02-19 14:21:07]
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Re: The Volcano
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th February 2006 @ 03:19:51 PM AEST
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WOW, very emotional and deep felt.
The format does not take away from the impact of this fine piece....well done sir!!! |
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Re: The Volcano
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 19th February 2006 @ 03:58:08 PM AEST
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| Terry, This is a superb conveyance of your feelings. The intenseness of your anger is felt. I am sure we can all relate to some of what you describe. The horrible times that come to pass, makes one grateful for life now. Thank you for sharing my friend and I hope all is well. Keep warm up north. Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: The Volcano
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th February 2006 @ 03:58:54 PM AEST
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Oh this I love.. another beautiful and creative skill in poetry formatting..Proper creative expression, perfect balance, creates a nice atmosphere, yes, extraordinary shaped poem.. creates nice visual images.. It truly placed power in the read.. lovely work, thanks, raquel Leah.. hugs..
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Re: The Volcano
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by DanishPoet on
Sunday, 19th February 2006 @ 06:11:18 PM AEST
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Well done with the format. And well written.
For another poem, you might want to write less important things in the middle, as people seem to pay most attention to the single words.
(The "flaw" in this poem is, that everything is important)
This is just the nature of humans ;)
Again, well done.
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Re: The Volcano
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 11:33:51 PM AEST
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I agree with Jarred about this being more like a tornado, I can see what he means.
Strangely, it does seem a lot like a volcano, too.
I don't know if it was just me reading it, but to me as the pressure got heavier, the words got faster...
I like how this flows though, like it's strong, and painful, and then suddenly it's good again.
Great write my friend.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: The Volcano
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by Nazmythian on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 12:09:01 PM AEST
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Bravo ... look at you go. A triumphant experiment Sir Terry. I have to say, I can see the volcano here. The point at the bottom, beneath the surface where the rumbling starts. The wide base where it lies on the surface attempting to contain and support all that it with holds and the cone at the top ... where when it can no longer suppress the all the internal pressure ... it erupts.
I have a new favorite, Terry. This, for you, was a giant step. And for the record a format I have never quite managed to conquer.
Nazzy ~
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