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untitled
Contributed by
pisces101
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Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 09:23:36 PM in AEST
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There was nothing
we should have done
Theres no object
to this game we should have won
My pieces and your pieces
never match
Our rejection and introspection
are clearly attached.
So darling good bye,
good bye for now
Let the curtains close,
Lets take our bow
My heart and your heart
separately beat
now beauty and scrutiny
only make us complete
Theres no need
for me here
No need for me
to be so insincere
My future and your future
are on different paths
Withdrawn, forgone,
It was all we had
so tell me
how’d I put myself in this position?
I cannot blame you
You simply were transition
Your concerns were not my concerns
You fail to see
You’re blindness and kindness
Are bitter-sweet.
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pisces101
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2006-02-17 21:23:36]
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Re: untitled
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by SmileSkinDeep on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 10:37:10 PM AEST
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This is a good poem. I don't exactly know how else to say it, it's just one of those things! I especially like:
So darling good bye,
good bye for now
Let the curtains close,
Lets take our bow
My heart and your heart
separately beat
now beauty and scrutiny
only make us complete
I also like the format-original. I appologize for the lack of constructive critisizem.
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Re: untitled
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by twick on
Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 01:20:51 AM AEST
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i like this because it shows you put some thought into it.
Favorite lines:
Let the curtains close,
Lets take our bows |
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