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Simulation
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 12:35:43 AM in AEST
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How sad to be alone..
sipping a bitter amber dream,
knowing some wilted lotus
lies tonight with a lesser envoy
from a place not mentioned in the best of circles..
thinking how the coming nights
will be so many dyseptic yawns without her..
recalling the tentative turbulence
of her white sappling thighs,
catapulting her into the painted
and unreturnable rhythm of some reality:
The soft giggling vowels against the stifled screen
under the cover of night.. remote charm and the like.
How sad to be alone..
standing at the filthy bus station..
bags in hand.. brown eyes lost
behind the haze of day-
waving farewell to a friend
who that night, will resume
unaccounted relations with others-
thoughts snap and crack like hearts and bones..
provoking quiet despair
and quietly.. I cry into myself-
recalling the lonely room.. back at the house.
How sad.. sipping bitter amber-
waiting to go mad;
hearing the mocking laughter begin..
a wilted perfumed lotus
and I think of crushed like silky - satin petals
under the velvety touch of some lesser envoy;
perhaps I will now at last, think of someone else.
excuse me while I yawn...
WK 2006
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Re: Simulation
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 10:00:41 AM AEST
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Lovely and sad at the same time. Perhaps in yawing u may fall into slumber only 2 awaken from a dream and find love can be unspectingly accomendating 2 one so in need of it not 2 mention worth while of it's merits. luck 2 u my fellow New Englander. nicely done Bill.
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Re: Simulation
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 02:19:36 PM AEST
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Billy, this is so beautifully written.... even if it's only a simulation...... (good that it is too)
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Jenni |
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Re: Simulation
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 07:29:11 PM AEST
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| nice imitation of something that is probably real. Looks as if one put their whole life into a love that turned sour.. ghoulish laughter.. that or laughing at oneself.. saying ok, nice backfire.. yep, time to move on.. this time, take it slow lol. raquelleah |
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Re: Simulation
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 09:24:02 PM AEST
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Simulation or not . . . damn deep this was. Billy, I am dumbfounded.
Completely and utterly speechless. ( shocking, I know ).
Gosh . . . how plainly commiserative the write is. And yet . . .
somehow
I am moved by it. As if my heart has heard some woeful song
and is stilled, now, to listen. Because, however forlorn and
mournful it is, the allure of your talent shines like no other.
And that, is a thing of beauty. For everyone to see.
Your depth is matched only by your virtuosity, dear friend.
~Breezy |
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Re: Simulation
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 18th February 2006 @ 03:30:29 AM AEST
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I would say this was quite a deep write,
Billy you did an amazing in this.
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Re: Simulation
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 10:35:40 PM AEST
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~*Billy*~
I can never explain in words what
ur phenomenal brilliantly penned
masterpieces do to me. You have
the natural ability to reach out to ur
readers heart and soul. You draw
them in and make them feel exactly
what you are feeling at that precise
moment. From ur day 1 on this site
you have simply blown me away with
your extraordinary work. Each and every
time you vary your writes and I like that
alot in a poet. You can captivate ur
reader from start to end with whatever
you write about dearest Billy. Be it happy,
sad, abstract, life poetry etc...
You are standing in the spotlight my
dear friend, it's ur time to shine.
May ur beautiful and phenomenal
masterpieces be published for the rest
of the world to enjoy and appreciate your
work as we have come to on this site.
I bow to ur excellence dearest ~*Billy*~
Shine on sweet guy.
*all my love and big warm hugs*
~*sue*~ |
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Re: Simulation
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by Lancaster on
Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 01:41:40 PM AEST
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"perhaps I will now at last, think of someone else."
an appropriate summation of being alone, when all you want is to think about times spent with another,
if that "someone else" makes you lonely after time elapses, then the bitter alone cycle starts again, and we are left....
"standing at the filthy bus station..
bags in hand.. brown eyes lost
behind the haze of day-
waving farewell to a friend
who that night, will resume
unaccounted relations with others"
how true
nice all over the place
great write
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Re: Simulation
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 02:10:00 PM AEST
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another amazing piece, bro. i'm sure you get tired of me telling you how great your talent is (and sorry for that)...but i must; your talent is beyond words...again, you have left me profoundly envious.
some may say that a simulated love is better than no love at all...though you've summed up my feelings on the matter quite perfectly...love is always followed by an undeniable wanting...and that all too familiar feeling of "aloneness"
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