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Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
Contributed by
Cynthia
on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 07:32:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
mythology
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Deep in the dark woods
You will be able to hear,
Fairies play their flutes
The butterflies will appear,
Gnomes dance, sing, cheer and eat fruit
Butterflies gather so near.
Copyright Cynthia Jones
Feb.5/2006
Copyright ©
Cynthia
... [
2006-02-15 19:32:15] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by poetmarie on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 07:57:24 PM AEST (User
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I like it. It's cute and fairytale like but I think you could go further with this. |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 10:17:44 PM AEST (User
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Rhyming well done, Cynthia. Imagery is beautiful. I would give this a +10.
Warm hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Greasefire on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 11:44:00 PM AEST (User
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I am drunk and this still does nothing for me. The fairyland pic nic theme is a bit worn. I am not seeing blood, sweat, and tears on the page. I'm only seeing an intellectual giggle. You can do better. |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by RandyMan on
Thursday, 16th February 2006 @ 01:05:04 PM AEST (User
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cute overview. I would like to see it expanded and tell the whole tale. |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 10:11:21 AM AEST (User
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What a unique and beautiful experience this poems is cynth. like the concept and the images it portrys. A most splend peice of writting.
((((cynth))))
Ben |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 09:30:32 PM AEST (User
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You may think me crazy, but while camping in those deep dark woods, there is mystery.. I feel those things, hear nature... and yes, gather His fruits... butterflies are in my tummy as I read your poem... this is a wonderful full pleasure filled poem in so little words.. delightfully opening up any soul who reads.. yes, delightful warm spirited at its greatest.. masterpiece here.. thank you for its creation..
hugs, raquelLeah |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by ek_da_poet on
Tuesday, 2nd May 2006 @ 04:23:06 PM AEST (User
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thats what i like to call original creativity nice job |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by andocommando on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 09:16:51 PM AEST (User
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i really enjoyed it but maybe taking it further would be good |
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Re: Butterfly Gathering (Rhyming Bussokusekika)
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 08:15:17 PM AEST (User
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exquisitely enchanting, so beautifully penned,
hugs n' love nessa |
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