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hurting me deeply
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 03:37:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Been so long
since the time we dated
I never thought the one
I deeply loved is the one
person that is hated
Wake up
see me!
HEAR ME!
I stand before you with out stretched arms
My heart bleeds in agony from the wounds you pound into it
over and over again
Do you not see me bleed?
I'm ripping to shreds
going insane
from your thoughtless games
A pawn in your palm
and you expect me to be fine...
**JENNI**
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PhantomVampyress
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2006-02-12 15:37:38]
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by shelby on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 03:52:35 PM AEST
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Incredible Jenni, such emotion.
Its sad though and I hope that your going to be ok.
Hugsssss
Michelle |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by all_that_i_can_be on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 06:14:43 PM AEST
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"Do you not see me bleed?
I'm ripping to shreds
going insane
from your thoughtless games"
i can relate to that. amazing write. so much feeling. i love it.
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 10:45:35 PM AEST
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| Wow Jen, that felt like getting hit in the head with a 2X4. Overwhelming power here. Excellent write. Thanks for sharing, Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 11:07:27 AM AEST
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excellent write! honest, and brutal
A pawn in your palm
and you expect me to be fine...
great imagery and a lot of emotion in those two lines
hope all is well! take care |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by Sinned on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 01:47:48 PM AEST
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Emotions----------------------------Ouch
Sinned |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 21st February 2006 @ 02:11:37 AM AEST
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Sad but beautifully written.
huggs,
emy
I'm sure your friend will appreciate it. |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 05:17:08 PM AEST
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| I hear your outburst.. I pray you are well.. hugs.. raquelLeah |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 11:51:41 PM AEST
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Ouch, I really like this. It's such a powerful and honest outpouring.
I loe how short it is, yet says exactly what it's meant to, in such a wonderful, simple, yet well done way.
I especially like the first stanza.
Great write hun,
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 12:31:23 AM AEST
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That was powerful stuff Jenni.
Well done.
J. |
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th March 2006 @ 12:23:23 AM AEST
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Very well written, Jennittude. I could really feel the emotion. I really like the imagery in the second stanza a lot.
Thank you.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: hurting me deeply
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by myheartsvoice on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 11:30:09 AM AEST
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Strong words depicting a very trying situation, love is like that and can erode one's heart as the sea erode's the shore. A true artful and touching poem. Nice work.
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