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Lines on Time and Flowers
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 02:42:55 AM in AEST
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I
The smile you brought
the evening of your coming
is a week of age this coming morning
yet it fills my room still
most sweetly and eloquently
and brings to my saddend mind
your gentleness strong as such
and breathing out of your now silent idealisim
II
Your hand stirred then;
delicate white petals in your lap
against your autumn-red leaf blouse.
III
Your gentleness disarmed me;
pointless my arrows fell
in the clear path of your gaze.
IV
You said little;
we broke from the net of words
the black forest of chosen language
free and familiar upon the bright strand
of our understanding;
happily and wise as only we can be
who demand nothing of each other;
we looked with eyes not in our heads
and were not dismayed.
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The small truth you brought with your smile
grows strong roots in the crevices of my heart;
not now.. nor forever... can you escape into my forgetfullness;
not now or forever.. can memories of you be lost
in the trap of time:
as a flower in my mind...
you shall grow
and time is kind to flowers.
Billy
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by emystar on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 02:50:27 AM AEST
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Time is for ever suspended in this beautifull, touching write.
Very plesent to a persons mind.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 03:59:31 AM AEST
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Beautiful and very touching write.
good job Billy. |
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by shelby on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 01:53:52 PM AEST
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Billy,
again you captured my being with this write.
Exactly what I needed to read today.
your pen floats the universe and touches those who read ever so tenderly.
Delightful my friend!
hugssss
Michelle |
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 02:44:22 PM AEST
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This brought such a beautiful and warm smile to my heart, my dear friend. Time is kind to those that bring beauty to the world also.
Much admiration,
Rita |
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 14th February 2006 @ 09:37:42 AM AEST
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what the hell...that was awesome!!!
if only to have an ounce of your talent an knack i'd be a happy man.
great write bro...i loved it beyond words...
always a smile does your pen evoke.
wiz |
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th February 2006 @ 08:34:07 PM AEST
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"not now.. nor forever... can you escape into my forgetfullness"
What a powerful line that alone is, but in this piece, it is monumental !!
So lovingly beautiful and sweetly rapturous. As always, Billy, you
stir emotions of the heart and soul. What I have said of your talent
in the past rings so loud and true in this and of that opinion I shall
never relent! This was brilliant.
~Breezy
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 12:30:41 AM AEST
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Rock on my dear friend.
Beautifully penned as always you captivate ur reader from start to finish. I bow to ur excellence my dear friend. You make the reader feel exactly what u are feeling. U have never disappointed ur reader for after having read ur work they are left in awe.Not many poets can produce outstanding masterpieces time and time again, but u my friend have managed to do that.
Hats off to u Billy. Shine on my friend.
*love n hugs from ur friend and fellow poet*
~*sue*~ |
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Re: Lines on Time and Flowers
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by Leslie on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 07:57:08 PM AEST
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| Your poem was written with much tenderness. Although ambiguous, I chose to see it as love for a child where memories never "escape into forgetfullness". |
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