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Sleep Lightly
Contributed by
NoSaint
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Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 07:02:08 AM in AEST
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Sleep lightly my chosen one
Your porcelain skin soon scarlet threads
After the setting sun
You will join the undead
Stir not from sleep
While I sing you passions song
Utter not a peep
Our desire will be eternity long
Wake now little chosen one
You are now my slave
My work here is almost done
None from damnation can save
Come join me my queen of night
In a feast in your honor
You will now come to fear the light
And look for your next blood donor
Don’t weep my sweet lady fair
You will come to enjoy your plight
And to know nothing compares
To a good hunt late into the night
Copyright ©
NoSaint
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2006-02-10 07:02:08]
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 08:30:31 AM AEST
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| clever write, it flows so beautifully....Mike |
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 03:50:29 PM AEST
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this is an awesome write.. I love the flow of it.. and its very eerie.. great job
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by lostrelic on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 03:53:36 PM AEST
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i liked this
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 03:59:20 PM AEST
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Beautiful flow, Shari.... I enjoyed this...even tho it was a dark write...lol
Jenni |
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 12:38:27 AM AEST
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Even if written as a dark poem, I found the light, good write too. So the only passion I was thinking of was His Com-passion. Thank you for your lovely poem, I enjoyed it. Raquel Leah
Deuteronomy 30:3 That then the LORD thy God will turn thy captivity, and have compassion upon thee, and will return and gather thee from all the nations, whither the LORD thy God hath scattered thee. |
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 03:36:08 AM AEST
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Another astounding write! I have read many vampire poems. A guy I grew up with wrote most of his poetry on the suject. This work sets itself apart of many other vampire poems. Mostly because it can be taken literally or figuratively, whether it was your intention or not. You may be talking about an actual vampire, or you may be using the vampire imagery to decribe the quality of someone else.
This makes this a very fun, wrap of words. I simply loved every line.
Awesome!
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by EmptyGirl on
Tuesday, 14th February 2006 @ 02:39:33 AM AEST
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| Be still my heart :) |
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Re: Sleep Lightly
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by BSteel on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 03:27:59 AM AEST
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Not bad in genral except i did not like the end kind of a sell out in my opinion but i love the first few lines,
sincerly,
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