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Goodbye
Contributed by
XxKittyKat8239xX
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Thursday, 9th February 2006 @ 06:29:53 PM in AEST
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As I look into your eyes
I know that everything is true
Your eyes describe my mood now
So alarmed and so blue
It's scary how just weeks ago
You'd look me in the eye
Now you can't look at me
While we're saying goodbye
At least you were man enough
To come up to me and say
You no longer loved me
You didn't feel that way
As sad as I am
You have all my respect now
You were honest with me
You didn't sit back and cower
At least I know now
So I'm not living one big lie
As much as it hurts me
It is time to say goodbye
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Re: Goodbye
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by outlaw_mutiny on
Thursday, 9th February 2006 @ 06:59:51 PM AEST
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| nice write. you could add and remove some words to make it flow better but good write. |
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Re: Goodbye
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by rationality on
Thursday, 9th February 2006 @ 07:33:43 PM AEST
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:] i like it
i wish more men were man enough to fess up sometimes
it hurts to be lead on for so long |
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Re: Goodbye
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by iodinelove on
Thursday, 9th February 2006 @ 08:43:49 PM AEST
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how is it true love if he no longer loves you? so many fail to know the difference between loving someone and being in love with someone...being in love means your gonna fall out of love (high probability), loving someone is loving them (unconditional love is a good example)
someone else mentioned that you could take some words out to make it flow better...you could...but if it comes from the heart there is no need. Poetry is meant to be raw. ^_^
always, abraham |
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Re: Goodbye
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by moon_goddess on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 03:37:05 AM AEST
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| men eh? lovely poem hun, keep up the good work, but here's hoping you don't have to get your heart broken to write :-) |
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Re: Goodbye
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 02:47:27 PM AEST
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Sometimes you give your heart and believe what you are getting back is someone else's in return.
When you find the person that really cares then don't let them go.
Steve |
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