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In Between The Lines
Contributed by
dvsnme816
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Tuesday, 7th February 2006 @ 07:50:58 AM in AEST
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Anticipate a change for a better life,
Nevertheless i'm still happy inside,
Guessing that jesus help me find my path,
Eventually showing the pedestal where i may stand,
Learning all i will ever need to know to succeed,
Serving my time because heaven seems eternally unseen,
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AND the serene turns into a fate that's unclean,
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Despite those words i got a devil looking over my shoulder,
Exhaling deeply with thoughts extremely vulgar,
My mind is torn in two and i'm stuck in the middle,
Onslaughts of devastation i imagined where the oceans ripple,
Nesting in my brain as an inevitable reality,
Skeptical if we will ever regain humanity...
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dvsnme816
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2006-02-07 07:50:58]
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Re: In Between The Lines
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th February 2006 @ 02:06:51 PM AEST
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Very well done, a constant battle between good and evil, I think we all struggle with choosing the right path at some point, being at the crossroads, I feel it is never to late to choose the right path
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Re: In Between The Lines
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by Whisper on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 10:37:43 PM AEST
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Nice write. Clever with the first letters thing. Good use of the words to hold the reader for the second and then introduce the other thought. Good write. I enjoyed it.
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