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Cliche Love Story
Contributed by
eleventoedsloth
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Monday, 6th February 2006 @ 11:21:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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A new face, in a new crowd.
"he could save me",
I whispered to myself.
"he could fix me, and make whole."
He approached me, looking scared.
Hurt.
No, he was bleeding.
And, I could see treason, and disregard pour from his wound.
"You were hit hard?"
and he just looked intently into my eyes,
holding back tears. Holding back demise.
I lifted up my own shirt,
to show him a planet-sized scar.
He smiled,
and I smiled,
for the first time in a quite awhile.
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eleventoedsloth
... [
2006-02-06 23:21:38]
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Re: Cliche Love Story
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 6th February 2006 @ 11:33:13 PM AEST
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| That was so sweet. Had to read it a couple times. Peace, Laura |
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Re: Cliche Love Story
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by temper on
Tuesday, 21st February 2006 @ 03:10:03 PM AEST
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| nice poem i love it |
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Re: Cliche Love Story
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by felicitous on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 04:15:48 AM AEST
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| despite spelling and grammer mistakes, this is a really nice little read. i've read a few of your poems now, and I think some of your work could gain serious recognition if the spelling was fixed up. but well done hey! |
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