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Bomber
Contributed by
adsalamon
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Monday, 27th January 2003 @ 03:40:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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Flak batter, Khaki coffin
Hardened shell, Weak within
Losing numbers, Vultures skies
Not alone, Whole group dies
Target seen, Bombs away
Maye never see, Another day
Twenty four up, Sixteen down
Nevermind, The broken town
Home safely, We die tommorow?
Aerial suicide, Away we go
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2003-01-27 15:40:00]
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Re: Bomber
(User Rating: 1 )
by Bizzy on
Saturday, 22nd February 2003 @ 09:16:18 PM AEST
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| Dear adsalamon, I like your style. Its an awful subject to think about. I hate what war does, but admire those who must face it in spite of its horrors. Bizzy |
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Re: Bomber
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 04:07:43 PM AEST
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| Very touching peace. Moves a bit quickly though, were you aiming for that? |
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Re: Bomber
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by Tinkkerbelle on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 03:42:15 PM AEST
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| Decent poem. Kind of fragmented, there's not really much of a flow. Unless of course you were trying to portray the rigidness and abruptness of war/battle/death... which in that case, great job! |
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