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alone state concise
Contributed by
lostrelic
on
Monday, 30th January 2006 @ 04:59:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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sweet sun shines on me in january where there is no leaves on trees
blizzards of ice and howling winds forgot us this season
ladybug on my hand a january delight flown in on a breeze
a fragrant smell a sense of spring with out a reason
out in this day smile from inner soul a lightness of mind
feeling wonderful in this time not affraid to show
a glimpse of past furries makes the beam so much of a find
but without those memories childhood thought' would blow
but in a alone state concise all there walking the street without a care
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2006-01-30 16:59:15]
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Re: alone state concise
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by weepingprophet on
Monday, 30th January 2006 @ 06:18:50 PM AEST
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masterfully written as yours usually are lostrelic. I always enjoy the abstract style you have that hits the power lines without a care. You know how to express your thoughts and opinions so well that your work sings. You are an underrated artist on this site i'm afraid. The good ones are victims of the ignorant people, it makes them stronger and more aware.
my favorite line was "but in an alone state concise all there walking the street without a care" it is so honest and raw but soaking in power and passion!
~i cover you in flannel shards to erase my promts from the face of all your lies~weepingprophet |
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Re: alone state concise
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th January 2006 @ 09:21:03 PM AEST
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a nice write rm a maze of ambiguity our world is in and u have captured it's lost innocence in this write, well done.
Ben |
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