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Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Sunday, 29th January 2006 @ 01:26:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Weak and cold.
Calculated
meaningless words
used to scold.
Lies unfold.
Countless told.
Kept disclosed within a box
for ages.
Tears spill.
Pens fill
and take to parchment
once again.
Levees fail.
Man made
walls cave.
Filthy scavengers
wallow in the mire of
hated places
with twisted faces.
Misled feelings
of desire.
Create some space
hesitate
contemplate.
Come to the stone house
throw rocks
crow like cocks
indeed
I do not care.
Frustrated
with the mind
of those
who inhabit
my earthly realm
Mouths of babes
moving
whilst brain remains
idle.
Use your cellphone
punch numbers
with long fake nails.
Decaying entrails
only blind eyes
can see.
So, I'm growing old
(my soul)
feeling cold.
Betrayed by a race of clones
I do not know.
False skin tones
made from beds of light.
Silicone breasts
sculpted by a knife.
Painted masks.
Faces erased.
Misplaced.
I've got a bad taste
what a waste.
I'm standing here
staring into an ocean
vast.
Heaving emesis
of disgruntled woes.
Unconquered foes
falling victim
to carrion crows.
Stepped onto
too many toes.
Looking for some sign
something familiar
to ease the mind
of one stricken
by so much failure.
Sinking in a tar slick.
Snake bit
lost in a
deep pit
of death and disease.
Something surely
will appease
the gods
I see
swirling in
a haze of
smokeless clouds
surrounding me.
Penned January 27, 2006
Laura Horner
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by shelby on
Sunday, 29th January 2006 @ 08:04:01 PM AEST
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Laura,
this is a moving work about life in general.
So many images and impressions leave my heart to flutter and feel what your going through.
Michelle |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st January 2006 @ 06:37:10 PM AEST
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| This is a hard hitting piece, thats for sure. Its quite good, and societal which I also like.. well done, laura, indeed. |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st February 2006 @ 12:04:51 PM AEST
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Wow, Laura. Powerful, emotional, imagery! So much here to take in. So well penned!. Did I say powerful yet? Awesome.
Thanks for sharing and take care.
Tim
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 2nd February 2006 @ 12:55:36 AM AEST
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I would so love to hear this read. I have written a few in similar style and would most certainly be interested to find out if i am really "hearing" the cadence that you do, or intended. I found many a terriffic line embedded within. A fine piece of writing in my opinion !!!
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by emystar on
Thursday, 2nd February 2006 @ 04:21:44 AM AEST
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girl I know u feel better after getting this out.
Well done, my friend.
Hope u feel all better now.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 2nd February 2006 @ 10:49:33 PM AEST
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This poem raises a multitude of issues; and the style and format seems a perfect fit for what you want to convey. It gives your words a lot of power. A unique and effective style. There seems to be a message to take heed.
Well done, my friend
Will |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 3rd February 2006 @ 12:41:56 AM AEST
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Laura this is a very moving, powerful very well penned and expressed piece of poetry.The style of the poem and the imagery cast are absolutely sensational. Well done.
*warm hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 3rd February 2006 @ 10:28:30 PM AEST
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I gotta say laura, I was a bit shaken up by this...
seems you've got your finger on the pulse of the world-
I loved it this.. very much.
Sincerely-
Billy
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 3rd February 2006 @ 10:39:32 PM AEST
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Yowsa!
I can see how it fits into the "sad poetry" category... but man, this has a kick to it. It has... punch. There's a quick pace here, I think, that makes it read sort of rant-like (in a good way, I mean). But yeh.... there's that heavy sigh at the end too, I think. Potent.
Thinking I'm probably overdue for a write like this myself,
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 3rd February 2006 @ 10:46:50 PM AEST
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Laura please accepet my humblest apologies....for referring to you as Shell......
I saw her at the top of your list of replies...and ignorance took over..though I meant the sentiments just the same...
sorry again Laura-
(feeling embarassed)
Billy
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th February 2006 @ 08:22:05 PM AEST
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Laura,
I don't know what I could add that others have not said already. I love this style and
you have done it so expertly. I am a bit lost when it comes to writes like this, (mine are
always coerced into a rhyme by some unknown force within). I always find it quite
fascinating and your word choice here was simply magnificent. A lot of depth in here.
Well done, Laura. I must peruse more of your work . . .
*hugs*
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 9th February 2006 @ 08:06:46 AM AEST
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just been reading the comments to this poem and the one that struck me the most was man on high's who accidentally called you shell! i bet his wife loves him in the middle of love making!
Anyway Doris this is another great piece by you well thought out and meaningful.
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 10th February 2006 @ 11:05:02 AM AEST
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| LOL Johnny you are such a card. I had such a good laugh at your comment...and I'm still grinning ear to ear. Thank you for that, Peace to you my friend, Laura (aka Doris by Wildejohnny) |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by enigma on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 06:33:33 AM AEST
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...boy, I hear it all...such a familiar scene...I have been an enigma for most of my life...the odd man out...alone in a crowd...the crazy who sees naked emperiors where others ooo and awww...I have been a deeply committed pessimist for most of my life...ironies of ironies, it is beginning to look like I'm going to die an unquenchable optimist...talk about a twist of fate...
...however, I could totally appreciate the tangle of emotions expressed in your poem...
...thanks for your thoughts,
ron...enigma |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Renoir on
Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 09:14:57 PM AEST
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| I can identify. This one has a jaded feel to it. I liked it btw. |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 01:26:02 AM AEST
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wow this is an amazing write.. I love the flow and how it covers just about everything in general .. awesome job my friend.. thanks for sharing this piece its awesome
JENNI |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 01:26:13 AM AEST
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wow this is an amazing write.. I love the flow and how it covers just about everything in general .. awesome job my friend.. thanks for sharing this piece its awesome
JENNI |
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 11:22:55 PM AEST
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Yes, welcome to earth. So many things happen as we live our lives, about people, places and things. Sometimes its very difficult to understand, sometimes a little nerve wrecking, and sometimes we grit our teeth. We are all in control, individually, in groups, teams, cities, states, countries, the world. A busy world we live in. A world of emotions. And we have a world going on inside of us too. This poem is full of so much frustrations and disappointments. Anyone reading can visibly see where we can use a little change to correct some of these trials and tribulations.
Great write, thank you..
your friend,
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Re: Stanzas of Disappointments and Betrayals
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by reprobate on
Saturday, 8th September 2007 @ 03:55:27 AM AEST
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Good read here.
I got something for you to ponder... do you not think it weird that there are so many kindred spirits within this place? Not that it's bad or anything. It's just that with so many different personalities here, I think it just a tad wonderous that they seem to gravitate towrds one another with any provocation other than a simple sharing of syllables.
Having wasted your day with that I'll say Adieu and...
many thanks for sharing! |
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