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bridal dress of rust
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 05:52:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
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a glare from my screen this creeping unseen a evil in my view
your words from a far that's stale and scare bringing hurt so true
this easel that hold's your madness in mind run in colours of ruin
but hidden away with the ghosts that play keep you company in your tomb
cobwebs and dust bridal dress of rust your harlets cave of deceit
hide there all day your pain you display folded as you weep
alone you forseen this nightmare of a dream its presence a scale of black
but the feeling to live and the scares you give shows your life so lack
but in everyday i see you protry a kindness that feeds off lies
in this you showed that the world is just gold spirit is dead with flies
why do you write telling me your fright when dead is all you see
i am alone surviving on my own just want you to leave me
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2006-01-25 17:52:20]
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Re: bridal dress of rust
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 08:23:46 PM AEST
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| A very good write. I understand just how you feel. I've often felt the same way. I can relate to this poem. It is really good. SLipSiX. Keep writing. |
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Re: bridal dress of rust
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by Lee on
Wednesday, 25th January 2006 @ 08:36:06 PM AEST
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"Lie a little more each day,
Can knot help facing you this way.
I don't have much to say...
You were but their prey...
I was but their prey...
All I can do is fall softly...
Asleep...to sleep...two sleep...two may enter."
Keep it up...
Jolly good show!
Sincerely,
Lee Ferris
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Re: bridal dress of rust
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th January 2006 @ 02:36:24 PM AEST
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quite powerful with between the lines emotional revalations, hiden secrets
provide 4 some stirring about amidst the old skeletons in the proverbial closset, quite captivating reading we have here, well done.
Ben |
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Re: bridal dress of rust
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by Jessie53067 on
Thursday, 26th January 2006 @ 03:21:06 PM AEST
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[i]but the feeling to live and the scares you give shows your life so lack
but in everyday i see you protry a kindness that feeds off lies[/i]
These two lines especially explain a lot of what my eyes have been recently opened up to. Someone who I thought was my best friend and knew me better than anyone else in the world betrayed me and my eyes have been opened to things that people around me have always seen. Those two line just really hit me hard.
Overall, I love it. You have a really unique writing style and really like it. Amazing write.
-Jessie |
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