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Skin I知 In
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 06:35:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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This is the skin I知 in
The package for this earthly trip
This is the colour of my race,
Shading the contours from toe to tip
Here, the canvas of my face
This is the piercing that boosts my pride,
Here are the scars from days gone by
This, the ink that marks my hide
These are the price from getting high
These are the creases of laughter and rage,
Here, the reminders of my sin
These are the lines from loss and age
The hint of illness that will finally win
This is the skin I知 in
But it is not what lie痴 within.
Copyright ﾂｩ
spike
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2006-01-20 18:35:01]
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Re: Skin I知 In
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by brew on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 07:21:24 PM AEST
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Loved the contrast and abstract of what is reality, yet its .........simplicity.!
Good post.
Brew~ |
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Re: Skin I知 In
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd January 2006 @ 05:03:55 PM AEST
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Last line ... Perfection!!
Spike, you astound sometimes ... I have tried to write something to this affect .. but to no
avail. Here, you take the idea, [ the concept ]and so skillfully pen it that it leaves little room
for interpretation. And still, it appears so amazingly simple for you. I am ever inspired and
so very glad to be visiting your pages once again.
*applauds widely*
Well done, my friend. Very well done.
~Breezy |
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Re: Skin I知 In
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 06:42:58 PM AEST
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There's that word again in one of the comments for this poem, "perfection". Cowboy says SUPERB.
So much enlightenment, awareness, and insight stated with such simplicity. Yeah, it's a pleasure to read anything of yours! |
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Re: Skin I知 In
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by Caged Soul on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 06:51:08 AM AEST
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Youve done a great job with this one.
A bit of humour makes it even better. The last line left me pondering, I'm not sure what it means to me yet. It's a total turn from the rest of the poem, and made it a bit strange. I still liked the poem though.
Ash~ |
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Re: Skin I知 In
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by Merry on
Monday, 29th May 2006 @ 03:05:06 PM AEST
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An interesting composite - really like the way you've created a tapestry of your earthly being, scars tattoos and the lines of age and laughter - it's certainly a good thing if we can accept the body we're in and and get on with the more important things in life. Well done.
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