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As The Time Ticks
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 01:34:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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As I watch the clock move
I think of how much I like you
As the time ticks away
I miss you more everyday
I wan't the time to freeze
So you won't forget me
Soon I will just be a name
One who played in the game
As the time ticks
I'm hit with conflicts
Tears will fall as I cry
When we say goodbye
With a hug recieved
I wil feel decieved
I never want you to leave
But the clock disagrees
As I sit and watch it move
I can't stop thinking of you
As the clock ticks away
I can' t face what's our way
The clock determines our fate
Tells us when were early or late
The clock drives what we do,
It tells me when to leave you
As the time ticks away
I miss you everyday
As I sit and watch it move
I can't stop thinking of you
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Re: As The Time Ticks
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostrelic on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 04:08:18 PM AEST (User
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a very heart felt post ty for sharing
r.m.wilder |
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Re: As The Time Ticks
(User Rating: 1 ) by SmileSkinDeep on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 06:07:49 PM AEST (User
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Nicely done, I really like it, especially:
"As the time ticks away
I miss you more everyday
I want the time to freeze
So you won't forget me"
good write
~April |
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Re: As The Time Ticks
(User Rating: 1 ) by brew on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 10:40:25 PM AEST (User
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Inner heart write, yet....there is always TIME.thats what we all have....so dont watch the clock and dwell.....Go get em.! Make the time stop, and freeze for the love.! If it goes out, it can be found again. Loved the fact, you want to stop time for them.
Nice post
Brew~ |
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Re: As The Time Ticks
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Saturday, 21st January 2006 @ 09:33:20 PM AEST (User
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Pretty good, some rhymes seemed forced, but the general concept and format was a good idea. thanks for posting. |
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Re: As The Time Ticks
(User Rating: 1 ) by Misunderstood_gurl on
Sunday, 29th January 2006 @ 07:43:46 PM AEST (User
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awesome job. I loved it! it rhymed really well and i ejoyed reading it. again i must say, AWESOME JOB! |
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