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MYPOEM STRANGER.
Contributed by
butterflygirl40
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Thursday, 19th January 2006 @ 05:01:45 PM in AEST
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There was once this actor and he answer that he wanted to be an author and a baker ,but of all this
He was a stranger with a beater and a cutter , And the stranger told me to put a dapper on it.
The stranger was wearing a darker kind of suit and he hated me .
The higher I tried to climb ,he would grab me and I found out he was a killer .
He wore a jumper and he was a hunter and told me he was a great kisser.
He had a bike and he told me he was a biker and a broker and he put his hand to the burner( Ouch) the stranger said.
The stranger once brought a camper and he captured a lot of people in it to kill.
The stranger always wanted to be center of attention and he ate dogs for dinner.
He had a red dresser and a dryer.
Then I said to the stranger OH NO dont cut me with that knife.
The stranger was a very hard kicker and he laughed with such terror.
The stranger drank milk and looked in the mirror.
But after begin with the stranger so long he finally told me to leave.
And I was so happy . I ran and ran as fast as I could ..
There will be no more of me believing strangers.
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Re: MYPOEM STRANGER.
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by TREBOR on
Thursday, 19th January 2006 @ 05:58:08 PM AEST
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Its very different , love the use of words ending in er , very orginal
Biker , broker and burner in same line !! Great originality
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Re: MYPOEM STRANGER.
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th January 2006 @ 11:10:47 PM AEST
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| Sad to say, there a lot of those strangers out there, luring people, babes drinking milk, yes, glad the person got away, and stay far away from harmful characters, a lot of time we are deceived, do not jump in with both feet, go easy with people, trust must come first. Very wonderful poem. I must go read more of your poems, they are chicken soup for the soul, that and you write, a very open and honest zen type of way. Keep your style, you may be the next big writter in the land Raquel Leah.. |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 12:26:02 PM AEST
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this was great i gotta say u certainly r one of a kind and this was a good read as well as a great write.
Ben |
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Re: MYPOEM STRANGER.
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by shutterfly2004 on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 10:41:11 PM AEST
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| this was really good |
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Re: MYPOEM STRANGER.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st January 2006 @ 02:00:50 AM AEST
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| Very clever. It kind of seems like a dream sequence. Very interesting. |
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Re: MYPOEM STRANGER.
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by shutterfly2004 on
Saturday, 21st January 2006 @ 02:20:13 AM AEST
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very good poem i liked it .. very different from most peoples love ya ,
Amanda |
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Re: MYPOEM STRANGER.
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by emystar on
Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 05:32:02 AM AEST
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Great writing.
It's a good ending but so many of these stories end the other way.
Keep up the good writing.
huggs,
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