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Just One More
Contributed by
confused_nutter
on
Wednesday, 18th January 2006 @ 03:47:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Every waking hour.
I think of nothing else.
A severe lack of power.
I sense my raising pulse.
Blankly gazing imbetween vast quantities of space,
Nothing else will occupy, no remaining trace.
Every inhalation, every grinding breath,
Creeping ever closer to my unforgiving death.
It's destroyed me as a being, the anti-personality,
Ten years down the twisting line, who knows what i'll be?
Of course I can stop.
It's easy, slam the door.
But for now, just for now.
I know i'll have one more.
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2006-01-18 15:47:01]
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Re: Just One More
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by happybunnyfan on
Wednesday, 18th January 2006 @ 04:02:41 PM AEST
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| Great write, i liked it, it reminds me of my past and present, struggles. This poem, i think, is something most of american teenagers can relate to. |
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Re: Just One More
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by Inevitable on
Wednesday, 18th January 2006 @ 04:42:58 PM AEST
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| I don't really understand it but I do like it |
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Re: Just One More
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by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 18th January 2006 @ 06:01:35 PM AEST
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it's good, and honest to the core...
I think a lot of people who struggle with addiction
can relate, myself included.
"It's destroyed me as a being, the anti-personality,
Ten years down the twisting line, who knows what i'll be?
great writing..keep it up! |
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Re: Just One More
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 21st January 2006 @ 09:51:07 PM AEST
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| Hey, I like this one. The ending most of all. Some of your rhymes were pretty good, with the couplets generally matching the meter quite well. Again, nice ending. Well done. |
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