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numb eyes
Contributed by
In_a_While
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Tuesday, 17th January 2006 @ 05:08:39 PM in AEST
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i pull and tear
at paper's hair
to see myself descend
within a line
of one numb mind
i seek a sour end
i spill and sell
my soul to hell
my God's a shallow drink
i paint in blue
my thoughts of you
and wonder what you'll think
shed my skin
see me smile
no more lips
no denial
peel my eyes
reveal a tear
know my art
as just my fear
dw
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Re: numb eyes
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by Mangos on
Tuesday, 17th January 2006 @ 06:40:24 PM AEST
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beutifully worded
i felt it
nice write |
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Re: numb eyes
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by weepingprophet on
Thursday, 19th January 2006 @ 08:57:29 PM AEST
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where to begin Dwayne this is mind blowing. This write is definately my favorite of yours as of now. My previous favorite was "Playground of Thin Bones" that write is simply exuisite. This one is masterfully worded as most of yours are but it is more raw than your usual posts have been. I could feel the intensity in some lines so brutal and full of rage but at the same time mellow and confident. lines such as " i spill and sell my soul to hell" the intensity is so alive in that. " buut my favorite line is the most raw and beautiful one in this write "peel my eyes reveal a tear know my heart as just my fear." that is explosive with emotions. you draw this image so precisely, "know my art as just my fear" that is perfect.
as always this was a marvel.
~your face is etched in my arm as subtly as the knife in my back~weepingprophet |
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Re: numb eyes
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by EmSal on
Thursday, 2nd February 2006 @ 06:09:25 AM AEST
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| Good write. |
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Re: numb eyes
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by troubled on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 03:07:27 PM AEST
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| Brilliant |
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