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I Surrender to Thee
Contributed by
2ndChance
on
Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 12:40:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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How may I see thee,
trapped beneath,
this supernova champangue sky;
May I touch and feel,
the spaces between,
your perpetually heartfelt fingers;
Sweetly indispensable,
where perfectly quiet moments pass,
holding back I witness your decent;
Surrendering to thee-once more.
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2ndChance
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2006-01-14 00:40:36]
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Re: I Surrender to Thee
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by princess_of_pain on
Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 12:51:28 AM AEST
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| awww i like it. especially the last part |
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Re: I Surrender to Thee
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 01:41:20 AM AEST
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I think the over all concept is very well conceived... I like that there is little structure/ rhyme...it suggests a particular honesty.
The third line seems very similar to lyrics taken from oasis? Regardless, this is a very heart warming piece. Well done :) |
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Re: I Surrender to Thee
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 03:16:51 AM AEST
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| awwwwwwwwwwww i like it nice poem. |
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