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Maidens Burst
Contributed by
NoSaint
on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 01:14:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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Hair dark as ravens wings
Eyes piercing black as night
Running her cloak flowing behind
She reaches the edge and takes flight
Watching he is mesmerized
As she morphs before his eyes
Flying soaring free on high
Surely if caught spying he will die
His heart light as he watches
Her circling high aloft
She dives close barely touching
Her feathers silky and soft
Then high above she climbs
Exploding into a mass of shooting stars
Leaving a wonderful vision
For many to see near and far
Now with every raven’s call
Or the stars go shooting by
He recalls that mysterious maiden
And with awe lets out a sigh
Copyright ©
NoSaint
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2006-01-06 13:14:45]
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Re: Maidens Burst
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by Fernanda_F_Rocha on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 02:12:21 PM AEST
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Excellent writing! such a beautiful imagery.
Congratulations.
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Re: Maidens Burst
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by sassydovebird on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 02:25:16 PM AEST
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| awesome...such sweet fantasy..wow,i love it so much....sassy |
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Re: Maidens Burst
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by shelby on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 03:15:39 PM AEST
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a dreamy write my friend, its so light and mysterious and happy beneath the surface, I love that!
Huggersssssssssssss
little star |
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Re: Maidens Burst
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 07:22:00 PM AEST
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*bravo* a very well penned piece of poetry which enthralls the reader from start to finish.
This I think is the first time I read any of ur work and it definately wont be the last. Well done and thanks so much for sharing ur wonderful work with us.
*hugs*
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Re: Maidens Burst
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 10th January 2006 @ 08:55:36 PM AEST
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Marvelous Shari, what a delightful concept! My Mind's Eye saw everything, and even heard his sigh! I don't know what it was that "turned you on" but these poems are great, and hope you aren't turned off for our sakes!
Bravo!
Warm love
consue |
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Re: Maidens Burst
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by crow6279 on
Monday, 16th January 2006 @ 09:51:48 AM AEST
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| I like this very much. So much imagery and imagination...and yearning...that is what it stirs within me |
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