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I'm the one who's dying
Contributed by
tier
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Saturday, 25th January 2003 @ 11:15:00 PM in AEST
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I'm the one who's dying here not you not anyone that knows me you may think that you hurt but do you cry yourself to sleep everynight hoping that one day you wont end up alone in a dark corner somewhere...afraid that someoen will do the same thing again that they will say they care but not really see how your heart burns and bearks for them to hold you close.....my heart is breaking for you touch it is screaming in pain because i cant see past me own insecurities to be with you...im scared that one day ill fall deeper into the darkness that once held me until you gave me light......forgive me for what i have done adn save me from my dying heart........
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Re: I'm the one who's dying
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th January 2003 @ 12:07:46 AM AEST (User
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It's funny that those words come from you......
I have always felt the same way.....
But who is it that you talk about?....
Cause I don't know who I talk about that way... many times....
"I cant see past my own insecurities to be with you" this is my biggest problem....
"Alone in a dark corner somewhere" is my greatest fear....
well you said no one commented on your work.
Sincerely
Pat. |
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Re: I'm the one who's dying
(User Rating: 1 ) by karoody on
Tuesday, 11th February 2003 @ 12:59:08 AM AEST (User
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loneliness is definitely painful. I also battle the same problems. so you are not alone after all. |
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Re: I'm the one who's dying
(User Rating: 1 ) by Broken-glass on
Monday, 18th August 2003 @ 03:27:57 PM AEST (User
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I like the way you wrote this poem. The no full-stops thing made it very powerful and intense like a stream of thoughts. This is how I often write and I think it gave your poem an extra edge to it. Well done!!! |
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Re: I'm the one who's dying
(User Rating: 1 ) by Broken-glass on
Monday, 18th August 2003 @ 03:30:46 PM AEST (User
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I like the way you wrote this. Very powerful and intense. It was written like a stream of thoughts which is often how I write. I liked it a lot. |
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Re: I'm the one who's dying
(User Rating: 1 ) by Broken-glass on
Monday, 18th August 2003 @ 03:32:18 PM AEST (User
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I like the way you wrote this. Very powerful and intense. It was written like a stream of thoughts which is often how I write. I liked it a lot. |
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