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Embrace the Fake
Contributed by
exodus
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Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 05:47:10 PM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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I saw a poor man
Rags draped over rags and he didn't shed a tear
I saw a man full of promise
I saw a man without fear
He had nothing but his rags
His heart was a swirling ball of hope
I wished to reach out to him
But with nothing myself I watched this man as I smoked
He seemed to me exalted
And with a smile I decided to change my life
To take advantage of all the lonely times
To deliver my actions even through strife
I saw all the empty ones
With their smiles they walked by an ingrate
This man took abuse for his lifestyle
He was a hero to me with such drive but wait
This man suddenly reached to his rags
Pulled a wad of bills, counted with his other hand
He smiled, a clip around dead presidents
And as he smiled be began to stand
He shook all his rags off
Left what seemed to be his only possessions on the ground
He walked to the alley with his wad and smiled
Unlocked his Mercedes Benz without uttering a single sound
So what's left of this example of hero
My mind is scattered to the wind
I put out my cigarette and wonder
What good does a message such as this send
I close my eyes
I turn myself totally and instantly inside out
My hero was faking his situation
He smiled inside his Benz and I soaked myself in utter doubt
It was a weight unto my brain
With wonders of how a man could do
Something such as this so terrible
Terrible and filled with an idea thats untrue
What a stupid ****
But is this to say of the man or me
I have seen the ways of the world
And just how not beautiful some **** can really truly be
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exodus
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2006-01-05 17:47:10]
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Re: Embrace the Fake
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 06:26:05 PM AEST
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Wasn't expecting this twist...Nicely executed.
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Re: Embrace the Fake
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by EmpressTayloria on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 09:19:34 PM AEST
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nicely written, you set the man's character out very well. i liked how you kept saying that he was smiling from his car, but didn't explain exatly how, leaving the reader to gather their own thoughts on the man (was it a smug smile or something of pride, was there a hint of shame hiding beneath his skin?)
great write, keep at it.
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