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5 Senses Scream
Contributed by
LoveStruck_Hippie
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Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 09:15:18 PM in AEST
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Tell me …
Do you smell it
The stench of a lie
Foul reckless odor
Lingers in time
Tell me …
Do you taste it
The bittersweet truth
Love is undying
Stealing our youth
Tell me …
Do you hear me
When I call your name
When my heart cries out
Is it in vain
Tell me …
Do you see it
The love that is there
Unbridled passion
Life isn’t fair
Tell me …
Do you feel it
My soul reaches in
Do you feel its pull
Listen within
Tell me …
Do you love me
With all that you are
Five senses screaming
Please heal these scars
~Shannon~
Special thanks to Nazzy and Breezy for their love, friendship, and support.
It means more than you will ever know.
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by trini on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 09:20:34 PM AEST
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Breath taking. Absoluty alluring.
You gave me shivers, this whole poem is excellent. I've never read anything like it.
Keep up the fantastic work!
-trini |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by Jazzy on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 09:22:31 PM AEST
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| i love it ..this poem is absolutely everything that ive wanted to tell some one but i was always afraid i'd hear the answers that i really didnt want ...keep it up hunnie ... |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by walks_in_clouds on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 10:05:12 PM AEST
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| I love to read poetry that flows like this. And I totally smell what you're steppin' in. |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 11:11:22 PM AEST
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Oh Shannon that was exquisite delight personified my dear.
You are so talented. And I'm just now getting around to find you. Or have you been before? I can't remember names but after I getr to know you, I never forget all about you.
Wonders never cease, had to join YPDC to find another Wyomingite.......I know you must be great...............all we Wyomingites are touch with big hearts!
Warm love
consue |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 03:43:15 AM AEST
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Having been privy to much of what you've written ... this then would probably be the finest I've yet seen.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 05:03:40 PM AEST
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You are getting much better at this, Shannon. You writing has greatly inproved. It is wonderful to see.
I love the parts of this in bold and italics. It's really effective.
Great write hun.
*hugs tons*
Phil xxx |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 05:05:52 PM AEST
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| wonderful voyage , the vessel of our senses... where inside, one light will brighten and heal and bring us peace.. RL |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 09:48:03 PM AEST
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I loved this the first time you shared it with me, sweetie. I ADORE this piece.
Deep, emotive and wonderfully thought-provoking. I agree with Philly,
you have grown as a poetess and in this write it is ever obvious!
And your love, friendship and support mean just as much, dear girl!!!
*squeezies and all that jazz*
~Breezy |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 04:11:51 PM AEST
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| Loved how you wrote this. Great piece Shannon. Much peace to you, Laura |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by artjunkiekyle on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 05:41:51 PM AEST
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| God gave you a gift! you write better than most other poets I know of. |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by Cancer on
Monday, 21st August 2006 @ 01:22:01 PM AEST
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i like the construction and how you didn't plunge on after the sense description like i would have been tempted to do. brief, but an endless story unfolds inside.
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by xxILoveTheSilencexx on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2008 @ 10:09:00 AM AEST
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wow that was amazing....
loved how you included all the senses into to this....
was beautiful....=) |
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Re: 5 Senses Scream
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th February 2012 @ 08:34:44 PM AEST
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Holy ***** this is incredible.
The power of poetry obviously exists in this. Impressive, Shannon. |
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