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sleep
Contributed by
idiotbox
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Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 04:56:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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let me sleep
the day is too bright
and the morning too nice
it'l ruin my mood
just let me sleep
my limbs hurt
my heart aches
and the floor is too hard
leave me wrapped in sheets
the gateway to my perfect world
is it raining....
good sleeping weather
the world weeps
but it pales in comparison
my heart melted in a puddle and dried
and formed a cloud that follows me
why would i leave my utopia
to see the sun outside...
it hurts my eye's and the cloud
just rains on me more in contempt
just let me sleep
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2006-01-04 16:56:01]
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Re: sleep
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by dc on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 05:02:31 PM AEST
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Nice write
Sweet dreams
Sleep tight |
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Re: sleep
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 06:27:49 PM AEST
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Well, I'd never be one to argue against sleeping!
I like this. There is a subdued power to it, since you've let the situation and surroundings portray what goes on inside, rather than spelling it out. Nicely done.
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Re: sleep
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by lostrelic on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 07:39:50 PM AEST
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great write with a cool flow and a great thought involved
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Re: sleep
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by MrJeans on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 02:27:24 AM AEST
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Very nice expression
in this good poem
I enjoyed this!
Interesting thoughts.
Keep it up!
Mr. |
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Re: sleep
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 07:21:43 AM AEST
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Very well write, although I don't agree on evrything, I think that ecspecially when you are feeling down, that is when you need to get out, see the bright world so that your mood can lift!
Thanx 4 sharing :) |
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