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Pain
Contributed by
Black_Rainbow
on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 11:52:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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PAIN
Sadness fills my heart today,
should i ignore it or run away?
my heart imnpaled with wounds so deep,
scaring myself as quietly i weep.
these wounds inside shal never heal,
i cannot stand this hell i feel.
i sit alone confused about life,
staring longingly at the knife.
should i gnore it? forget its there?
nobody else seems to care.
should i run away leave it all behind?
noone would notice, everyones blind.
i have nothing to live for now,
i might aswell take the final bow.
as the curtains fall and all turns black,
its over now no turning back.
now my life is at its best ,
im peacefull now that im at rest.
no sadness, no pain, no wounds inside,
im alone now no need to hide.
Copyright ©
Black_Rainbow
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2006-01-03 11:52:24]
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Re: Pain
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by glu1 on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 12:02:34 PM AEST
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| i won't suffer you with cliches, i'll take this poem as a piece of art, not history and as that it's fantastic. Was the lack of capital letters a comment on how you felt or coincidence? |
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Re: Pain
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by Black_Rainbow on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 12:06:53 PM AEST
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| im not too sure a bit of nboth i think really. i didnt really want the poem to come across too much like my past but more of a story about someone going from life to death and showing the differnt feeling of fear and peace, i guess the lack of caps just helped the poem seem a bit less important, reflecting how they felt about their life |
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Re: Pain
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by dc on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 12:29:57 PM AEST
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| Nice job -keep writing! |
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Re: Pain
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by Dawny on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 02:24:43 PM AEST
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I find that writing about your feelings both helps you to deal with them, and makes them a little easier to deal with. This is dark in places, and you can feel the wrestle with the "shall I do it or not"
Didnt like the lack of capitals, but thats just me!! I thought this was very well written, good poetry can be felt, and this one just drips with emotion. Good job
Love Dawny xx
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Re: Pain
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by Alliee on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 03:52:53 PM AEST
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i love how you used your poetic licence to your advantage and didn't capitalize anything. this poem is dark, but its obivously a wonderful write and hopefully helps you cope with things, i know poetry helped me =]
allie |
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Re: Pain
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by crimson_regret420 on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 04:17:22 PM AEST
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| I like! Definitely dark and sorrowful, but artfully written. Some of the spelling errors distracted me from the piece but so is your creative license! nice poem, and keep writing! |
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Re: Pain
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by Black_Rainbow on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 06:07:20 PM AEST
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| im really suprised you all liked it so much, the last site i posted it on i had people moaning at me for wanting attention and that i should go ahead and kill myself. Thank you all I really apreciate it |
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Re: Pain
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by Jazzy on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 06:09:14 PM AEST
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| no dont kill yourself keep using the pain you used in this poem to your advantage it's sad in a way to say it but these painful poems are what attract me because i have a book full of poems that have to do a great deal with this exact topic...keep writing ..stay alive you help others with every word you write...love and respaect ~Jazzy~ |
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