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Veil of Tears
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Sunday, 1st January 2006 @ 06:25:19 PM in AEST
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Purge the memories from my soul
Cutting the curtain that plagues
Burning, so I do not extinguish
Trying to find an answer in a veil of tears
My toil leaves me tired
And this life is all for naught
Bless me with a sneering happiness,
But forget to ask the question
Why should I put on a veneer
Of happiness and blissful smiles
When my teeth chatter with pain
And my laughter is a hollow sound?
Favoured with insomnia
That only intensifies the ache
My hands are covered in blood and guilt
The blood sprayed on the wall
Is (not) mine
And I only wish you were
Dead,
Dead,
Like me
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2006-01-01 18:25:19]
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by FleurdeSang on
Monday, 2nd January 2006 @ 04:22:12 PM AEST
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Hey, mister, :)! I just finished talking with you guys, hehehehe. Anywho, as I've said over and over again, you're a friggin genius, and dark poetry is very much your element. (Well, I probably haven't said that last bit over and over again, but... you know... :P.) Dripping with venomous hate and defiance, questions left unanswered, frustration, despair... Yet, somehow there is a sense of strength in the midst of all the darkness.
A spiteful wish towards the one that has hurt you... in which, I'm sure, many can relate. I know I can. My favoritest stanza, though the poem in its entirety is magnificent, this one stood out the most for me:
Bless me with a sneering happiness,
But forget to ask the question
Why should I put on a veneer
Of happiness and blissful smiles
When my teeth chatter with pain
And my laughter is a hollow sound?
Incredible... heart-wrenching... Real. That's what I enjoy most about your poetry, cheri... it's real, and chalk full of emotion that is so strong, it makes the reader feel them as well. The most chaste of heart would succumb to your words with their own veil of tears... I hope things will turn out right for you soon, honey. Excellent write. You never fail to impress, :). Always,
Your avid friend/fan,
~Stephy-Kins. ^.^ *hugs* Love ya!
P.S.- LOVE the title! |
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by freckle on
Sunday, 8th January 2006 @ 07:39:33 PM AEST
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Ooooh! I really liked this one. Especially the lines:
My toil leaves me tired
And this life is all for naught
Hit right where I'm feeling it tonight! Sheesh, you read my mind!
Great write, dark work has a part in all of us and you expressed it so well. I also loved the end...Dead, dead like me....great write!
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by Cancer on
Wednesday, 1st February 2006 @ 12:18:12 AM AEST
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delightfully sorrowful. and you are quite right in the first line on the hiding place of memories.
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by freckle on
Wednesday, 1st February 2006 @ 10:03:53 PM AEST
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Hey there....I've already read this and posted a comment...but I decided to read it again tonight...lo and behold...a totally different line hit me as my favorite tonight...
Bless me with a sneering happiness,
Cool beans!
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Re: Veil of Tears
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 3rd May 2006 @ 07:46:25 AM AEST
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~*Joel*~
A sad, emotional and pain filled write. You have expressed ur deepest thoughts and penned them down brilliantly. You have a way of drawing in ur reading. I have re-read this piece over and over again.
Bless me with a sneering happiness,
But forget to ask the question
Why should I put on a veneer
Of happiness and blissful smiles
When my teeth chatter with pain
And my laughter is a hollow sound?
If I could just say to u how much I can so much relate to these written words. Each day we put on a smile and we pretend that everything is okay, but really it's not. It's like one is slowly dying a miserable death. I guess one becomes good at hiding their emotions from others.
An outstanding, sad and emotional write penned by a very remarkable and gifted poet. Well done ~*Joel*~ I hope that all is well with u my dear friend.
*hugs galore*
~*suzie Q*~
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