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Stinging in Forevers
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 09:17:24 PM in AEST
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View the ever saddening joke
that helps one pained heart cope
The dreams seemed so damn real
(I swear I could sense your presence)
Your laughter I could hear, your smile I could feel...
an almost psychic link at times; did you feel it too?
My hurt spilled out so clumsily...did it cause you strife?
Could you sense me at night, before you drifted off to sleep?
You awoke my dreams in ways I dare not have wished
sometimes I wonder why we were meant to meet
An answer that once appeared so clear, has become obscured
it really seemed a work of fate; it was almost eerie at times
To say you don't believe in it, is kind of ignorant, I must say
What about that special story, you were told as a kid?
I'm happy for every moment that I made you feel good
I grin when I think of us kissing, even though it never occured
I'm calmed by your touch, but have never experienced it
Damn! I miss you so much...now isn't that absurd?
Conversation stilled, but still embedded in my mind
Nothing really to long for, as you were never even mine
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 12:25:06 AM AEST
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| awwwwwww this is so sad but this is a good poem i liked it... take care and hope you have a safe new yr |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by emystar on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 02:02:25 AM AEST
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a BIT SAD BUT WELL WRITTEN.
hAPY NEW YEAR TO U.
HUGGS,
emy |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 02:22:54 AM AEST
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(((((((((((((((((((( PerfectoScorp ))))))))))))))))))))
Always sneaking one in here right under my nose! ;-)
You're absolutely correct. "Gotta write it out to get over it."
And you always write it out in such brilliant fashion. Even though sadness is in this one, your poems never disappoint us. Written with the Scorperiffic passion and perfection!
Please know that you are not at all clumsy and as for as meeting that "one" that we were meant to meet for some weird reason but not meant to be with. I just think it's one of those life's lessons to help strengthen our hearts and help us learn to recognize the "one" that really is meant to be.
Take care....and I know I already said it but will say it again....Happy New Year....Wishing you the best of the best in 2006 and beyond.
Me
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 02:24:58 AM AEST
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| P.S. I forgot to say as well as loving this poem I love that title!!!!! |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 03:37:19 AM AEST
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This is beautifully written pain. We all suffer from it occasionally and it does sting badly. But, as you said, write it out. Then write it off as another life lesson learned. Scorperiffic, I hope 2006 is a better year for you. Well, heck, for me too. Wishing you the best in life and love.
Rita |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by brew on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 08:37:31 AM AEST
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Just magnificent Miss Scrop
The pain of feeling, and meeting, then not exactly keeping. It happens, but as Tim says....Its better to have met, and learned now...than to have met, and kept something that wasn't going anywhere. I hope all the happiness for you and whom ever wanders into the scropys path........2006 will be a venturous year.!
Happy New Year, and who knows., Maybe that yank at times square will be Southern, and sweep you off your feet! Muwahahaha.......Keep smiling
Hugs,
Brew~ |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 11:05:53 AM AEST
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I won't tell u the effect this poem had on me as i got closer 2 the end but wow, you've reach for and touch and even penetrated with this one, great write scorp, as always your style manages 2 give u away, and reveal what u r truly feeling in your heart . . .
((((((scorp)))))))
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 05:45:30 PM AEST
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aw scorpy ... I so hate it that you are in this place right now ... but just think
-- you'll soon be in NY and kissing all the yanks you can get your hands
on ... (or something along those lines! )
I can relate to a lot of what you've written here, (as you very well know), and
I have actually tried my hand at a piece such as this, but I must say, you
expressed this emotion far better than I could have. Life is not always sunshine
and rainbows and if you've not captured the essence of that statement
with this, I don't know what could !
"Conversation stilled, but still embedded in my mind
Nothing really to long for, as you were never even mine"
Gosh ... those lines right there. Ouch !! Yep, the title MORE than fits it.
A most remarkable write, scorpy, although heartwrenching for various reasons ...
Have an amazing New Year's Eve and a super-duper-stupendo-fabulous 2006 !!
*huggles*
~Breezy |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by LostAmbition on
Saturday, 31st December 2005 @ 12:40:02 AM AEST
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Ive felt this way before
& it seems u love him
deeply. This is a very
real type poem
No holdin back
Have a good
new year scorps :D |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Alibi on
Saturday, 31st December 2005 @ 11:21:20 AM AEST
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| Dear Scorp, this is so entirely honest of you here. I know it couldn't have been easy for you to post this. It's from the heart of a kind soul. I hope you're having fun this weekend, thank you for the pm, and happy new year to you too :) |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 31st December 2005 @ 12:21:04 PM AEST
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Great flow, great verse, lovely rhymes and stuffed with tons and tons of incredibly powerful and sad emotions.
Is pain a prerequisite to being a great writer???
It would seem so.
My heart goes out to you...hugs.
You may not have ended the year on a happy note, but you sure made it a powerful one! |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 2nd January 2006 @ 03:42:02 AM AEST
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love it love it love it.....i love your beautifal mind grr i wana write like u lol......*pouts jelously* happy new year, and awsome write.
SM |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Mangos on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 06:59:03 PM AEST
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this sounds like it just flowed off your toungue perfectly,
great poem as always |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by MrJeans on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 02:20:36 AM AEST
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In a word:
Heartfelt.
I could feel
the deep love
and respect here
Sad its over or
never began?
Sounds like your on vacation
at least.
Hope you have fun!
Mr. |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Spazzo on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 09:27:23 PM AEST
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This is really sad but a really great poem and I hope things get better for you.
Take care.
Scott |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Thursday, 19th January 2006 @ 09:46:40 AM AEST
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This was excellant. I really liked it. I mean you are talented and The way you put the words together and make the poem flow is just simply brillant. I hope you have a good 2006. I am trying too. Great poem..
take care
christina |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 08:21:28 PM AEST
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After reading and commenting on your last poem I was intrigued to see what else you have come up with.
You are a very talented poet and quite rightly judging by your reads very popular.
I stand in awe.
J. |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 08:46:41 PM AEST
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This is beautifully written."I grin when I think of us kissing,even though it never occurred".Mountains of yearning here,
Den |
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Re: Stinging in Forevers
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 27th May 2014 @ 01:28:23 PM AEST
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you never fail my friend, your poem as all your poetry flows
and moves so swiftly, all the yearning and burning for someone
you cannot have, a spectacular and moving piece, to be sure,
this flows like a thought running through a mind, it is sadly so
beautiful,
hugs n' love nessa |
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