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No One Will Hear
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 01:01:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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In a small rundown shack
Just outside of some town
Little nowhere type place
Where no one would be bound
He sits shaking a fist
In the dark of the night
At all of the things that
Went wrong with his life
And the dreams he perceives
Time has stolen away
From a youth unaware
They could not be replaced
And he curses the child
That he once had been
As he pulls at his hair
And he picks at his skin
As he tries to erase
What’s become of his face
His anger turns into fear
That no one will hear
How the minutes pass by
As they turn into years
The days become numbered
As well as the tears, and
The heart that was hardened
Immune to the pain
Grows soft with each chorus
Every passing refrain
He dials all the numbers
He strains to recall
To beg for forgiveness
On debts in default
For the times he was gone
And for all of his flaws
The times he was wrong
And the pain he has caused
For all his obsessions
And every transgression
To everyone he once held dear
Still no one will hear
All the bridges he’d burned
Such a long time ago
Couldn’t hope to re-span
What continued to grow
The chasms had widened
And deepened as well
He would die all alone
In his personal hell
He saw demons released
Gathering at his feet
And they waited with glee
For his soul to be free
They fought one another
To be next in line, for
A taste of his spirit
On which they would dine
And the last thing revealed
With his final appeal
As the angels began to draw near
Someone always hears
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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2005-12-29 01:01:16]
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by emystar on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 01:20:37 AM AEST
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Very powerfull, wise write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 12:12:57 PM AEST
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Typical Nazzy. Deep and very profound! What a perfect drive by kinda day. This is writing at it's best. I wish all the newbies could learn something from you and your writing skill.
::::vroooooooomvrrrrrooooommmm::::
(((Nazzy)))
Angel always...Joni |
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 12:45:24 PM AEST
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Heavy stuff Nazzy; very powerful (and effective) ending. This had a great flow too, which added to the intensity of your emotion-packed words. Nicely done.
Scorp. |
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by DreamPoetess on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 07:12:59 PM AEST
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| Kept me reading the whole way through. Interesting poem, I enjoyed it a lot |
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 08:30:55 PM AEST
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I know how much writing this must have taken, Scott...
It all seemed so hopeless, but it proves that things can always get better, and it's true, someone is always listening...
A powerful poem, in all the right ways.
Good write,
*hugs*
Phil xxx
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 31st December 2005 @ 12:32:12 PM AEST
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WoooHooo!!
Stands and claps!!!
As serious and sad as this piece ran, I was knocked over by the ending.
Awsome sir! just plain awsome!! |
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 12:11:53 PM AEST
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Naz, a very powerful and personal write, dealing with your relationship with your father; but even moreso his connection with himself and his life. This write reminds me of Erik Ericksons' (sp?)book, "The Eight Stages Of Man." The last stage, in our old age is "Satisfaction vs. Despair". How expertly you have depicted your father's despair.
Nazzy, I'm more and more realizing how much of yourself you put into your poems.
Well done my friend. It causes me to reflect on my relationship with my own father; and his connection with himself.
Will/Terry |
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Re: No One Will Hear
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 01:55:44 PM AEST
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Again, beautiful. I love your choice of words, it seems so natural, they fit in where they should.
Take care.
David |
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