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Inevitable Outburst
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 03:32:58 AM in AEST
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Let's get sidetracked for a minute
Let's say something we'll later regret
Wanna know what's on this satiated mind?
A tripped up memory from a moment in time
We'll throw in an odd word or two---go Yanks!---Yeah, that'll do
Blunt-forced trauma --- what a joke
Action-packed drama --- murder she wrote
We're talking something complex; slightly far-fetched
The boundary of a relationship is under duress
Greedy worm bore down to the core of the tossed apple
Tug of war with the dry wishbone; hear an audible snap
All across this city there's a deviated mirth
The spirit of the season --- winter's slutty flirt
Screw this---bartender; hook me up with another round
A shot of irony, a sip of haste; make sure it burns going down
Squander away the pie-eyed plantation of dreams
Confiscate the microphone! This speech is unknown...
Random! Random! Random! ( Can't let the message seep out )
Victim of reality --- truth's ugly second cousin begs a kiss
Look up at the sky; watch the star's fall with suicidal glee
Now back to what I was saying...Hell, what was it again?
A penny for these thoughts, but where do we begin?
Sit in the plush seat, where all the confessions leak out
I'll tell you what I'm thinking, when I know what it's about
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-12-27 03:32:58]
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 05:15:16 AM AEST
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Dear lost one,
You may not be "rich", but in this world of pleasure there are few "poor". I believe this applies to you.
Jesus said, "Again I tell you, it is easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle than for a rich man to enter the kingdom of God."
When the disciples heard this, they were greatly astonished and asked, "Who then can be saved?"
Jesus looked at them and said, "With man this is impossible, but with God all things are possible."
Love finds a way. Have faith.
Joshua
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 05:27:32 AM AEST
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| Now this is a deep InnerVision |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by brew on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 10:33:18 AM AEST
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well....miss scorp.........what a new way of putting thoughts, in someones perspective.~ I am guessing they will relate, or just think your TOTALLY nuts.
Personally , I can realte, to just letting the thoughts of all flow on paper, and come out as they , may.! Liked this alot, and YES..........I can understand, all so well.!
Whiterobes, in their eyes sees you as LOST..........good analogy,but, I dont think its exactly how they put it.! maybe you are to an extent lost with inner self........But, who can blame you?!?!?! Again, always a pleasure, to read work from yourself.
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by crow6279 on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 12:50:23 PM AEST
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I like this...the style and the wording. I tend to write abstractly and flow of consciousness...with random thoughts finding their voice through my fingers.
Very good submission |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Mangos on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 01:46:30 PM AEST
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i think the last line says it all, sums it up...alot of confusion mixed with emotions.
nice write , as per your usual
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by MrJeans on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 01:48:57 PM AEST
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The spirit of the season --- winter's slutty flirt
Screw this---bartender; hook me up with another round
A shot of irony, a sip of haste; make sure it burns going down
Squander away the pie-eyed plantation of dreams
Something there tells it all
I agree with secretwind
Very deep and written in a
unique and captivating form
We all have these "outbursts"
from time to time
Feel better soon
Best wishes
Mr.
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 02:07:37 PM AEST
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Mix up cynansim, boredom, a bit of self pity and a large dose of humour....craft it well with clever lines and verses and a keen mind...and WOLAA!!
Amazing scorpy!!! |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 04:37:48 PM AEST
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This is awesome.
Take care.
Scott |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 07:36:22 PM AEST
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"Just nonsense mutterings really"
Yeah but what scares me is that a lot of it makes sense.
"Wanna know what's on this satiated mind?"
Well, definitely a lot. A little of all brilliantly put together with the Scorpenator sting as only you can do.
An Awsomnator Write!!!!!
(((((((((( Scorperiffic ! ! ! ))))))))))
This was sorta like the A La Carte look into the abstract mind of my Scorpendous friend!!! Just so wonderfully done!
Take care Scorperiffic.
Me
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Alibi on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 10:40:32 AM AEST
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Scorp dear, a sad and potent write. I don't think this is meant to be sarcastic as some others perceive. It seems to be filled with anguish, and a broken heart. You come up with a new way to write every time you post! I like the style of this poem.
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 11:33:43 PM AEST
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Scorpy, scorpy, scopry!
My dear SCORPY!!!!! What an EXCELLENT write. Gosh, how I simply
love this from start to finish. (feel like I was right along there with ya).
The imagery here is ingenious!!! I can't even find the words
remarkable enough to express how you've wowed me with this one
scorp!
*is so very amazed*
~Breezy |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by emystar on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 12:18:41 AM AEST
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Very creative writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 05:24:26 PM AEST
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Delightful read Scorp! Like a free floating stream of consciousness. Also, got an image of someone getting up and singing kereoke(sp?). I don't know why, "but lets get side tracked".... ThIs write made me think of Fritz Pearls book, "In And Out Of The Garbage Pail....: A Gestalt therapist. Go figure?
Well done Scorp, and thanks for all your reads and comments on my poems. I appreciate it.
Will
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by DreamPoetess on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 07:28:47 PM AEST
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| its all there, nice reading for me |
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Re: Inevitable Outburst
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by needledancing on
Monday, 7th May 2007 @ 11:41:22 PM AEST
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I thought this was the inside of my head for a minute.lol
If everything we thought poured onto paper we would all want to have some analysis...thank goodness we are spared the invasion.
I love this as well...it is who we are..how we fly with our thoughts...a great write and perfectly honest sharing of ones self. |
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