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Alcoholic
Contributed by
Candice
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Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 12:50:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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I know that you will judge me
Before I even begin
Everyone has a weakness
My weakness is Jin.
The void in my heart
Grows deeper and wider
I try to block it out
fill the hole with sider.
Drink it through a straw
To get drunk quicker
Don't wanna face the pain
Instead I turn to liqua.
I awake with a stranger
My vision gets misty
Did I get up to quick?
Or was it that whisky?
Pennyless,
Husbandless,
Childless
And alone,
I lye here with Jack Daniels
Inside my broken home.
I grew up a long, long time ago
I'm old beyond my years
This habit I'm accustomed to
Defends me from my fears
I write this as a mean for change
This sickness must be cured
I know I can't go there again
I'm scared I will be lured.
Copyright ©
Candice
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2005-12-22 12:50:54]
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Re: Alcoholic
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 01:48:03 PM AEST
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Very good write :)
Hope all goes well, good luck!
Luved this part: I lye here with Jack Daniels.
Thanx 4 sharing. |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by maestar on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 02:14:39 PM AEST
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great ryming, inspired!
well done
maesy
xxx |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by poet_of_anger on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 03:24:07 PM AEST
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| A very emotional, personal work. Very well done. |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by lostrelic on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 03:36:29 PM AEST
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great write i liked the flow and the words you used
r.m.wilder |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by Hannah_Heaven on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 05:18:24 PM AEST
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a touching poem, my dad use to be an alcoholic...sadly he gave in and still is ..
great poem xx |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 26th December 2005 @ 05:24:32 PM AEST
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| Well its best to admit it then you can get help, dont think this is you Candice, pass me that bottle of gin dear. xxx |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by Alina on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 02:56:22 PM AEST
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I can understand your fears, once you're an addict, it will always be that way, for the rest of your life, you just have to learn to cope with it and make the right decisions, it's tough, and it's something I struggle with everyday...just believe in yourself and find other vices, such as writing your poetry...
The second to the last stanza is what made this all the worth while.
ALINA |
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Re: Alcoholic
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by Manda2 on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 11:31:13 PM AEST
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| Great write Candice. Write another! |
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