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The Shirt Comes Off
Contributed by
Jyssvw22
on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 07:15:41 PM in AEST
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If I were attached to your hip
Would you be on my side
Smooth shotgun
Can we go for a ride
Can I spend the night
Should I go
I bought my ticket
I might as well stick around for the show
The words have been stricken
Taken, out of context
Put it back in perspective
And then see what you get
Whats coming
What went
What disappeared
What was left
It’s a long walk home
Should I hold your hand
Are you cold
Would you want my coat
Gloves and scarf
The shirt off my back
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Jyssvw22
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2005-12-21 19:15:41]
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Re: The Shirt Comes Off
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 08:20:51 PM AEST
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Interesting work. A bit abstract, but that's no bad thing.
Keep it up.
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Re: The Shirt Comes Off
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by Aquaelius on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 09:21:55 PM AEST
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I like this little part here:
"The words have been stricken
Taken, out of context
Put it back in perspective
And then see what you get"
Ain't that the truth? What would you get... less problems. Thanks for sharing.
Aq. |
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Re: The Shirt Comes Off
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by brokenwings on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 02:36:27 AM AEST
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| nice |
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Re: The Shirt Comes Off
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by Jazzy on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 09:19:33 AM AEST
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| this is a really good poem , very easy on the eyes and brain not too much going on but everything was said.... |
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Re: The Shirt Comes Off
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 24th December 2005 @ 09:42:32 PM AEST
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Words have a funny way of wiggling themselves out of context quite often, especially when they're being read, as opposed to spoken...So I won't dig into the meaning of this too much, bearing that in mind. Seems like an ending...Hope things get better for you soon.
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Re: The Shirt Comes Off
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 21st March 2006 @ 11:37:19 AM AEST
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great poem.. I liked this alot. It was written well..
take care
christina |
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