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sadness called blue
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 06:25:30 PM in AEST
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tranquil sounds of the ocean surrounds blocking out sharks teeth
a venus dream of sunlight beams shinning off the reef
a vision blue thats set so true a vision on your mind
escaping thoughts like concrete blocks that gets lost in time
angels voice a sound so choice but blinded by our ears
but in our time with out a line the song will come in clear
dead does walk in suits they talk but this is nothing new
we always had a living corpse stumbling in our view
with this day i will betray a thought as dark as night
in my wake i will partake to blend with all the light
bend and weave all threw the trees i will run from all of you
in my escape i will embrace the sadness thats called blue
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Re: sadness called blue
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by MasterPoet5 on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 06:57:23 PM AEST
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| brilliante! |
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Re: sadness called blue
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by outlaw_mutiny on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 07:03:32 PM AEST
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good write but in the last stanza you lost your rhyme scheme but that makes it unuque like a puppy with a patch on it's eye
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Re: sadness called blue
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by BEBE on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 07:22:09 PM AEST
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weird!!? No not very weird... lol different! lol great job
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Re: sadness called blue
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 07:52:02 PM AEST
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very sad but well written.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: sadness called blue
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by brew on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 08:31:49 PM AEST
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Your writes are not weird, Regan. just to the point and from the heart.! Keep posting wonderful writes, such as this.! I hope the saddness will turn tho.! Happy Holidays......
Brew~ |
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Re: sadness called blue
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 02:21:09 PM AEST
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| nice poem. |
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