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Dead Ends With Definitions
Contributed by
grey_matters
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Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 01:27:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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It's a big box, four walls,
and i'm not, at all,
staying inside, the lines,
I've got insight on the outside...
She's a deep hole, that grows,
to take, me home,
she's so dark, and deep,
and dead ends are well defined...
It's a bored game, he plays,
on the things, he made,
and the rules, won't break,
but he's my favorite of my saviors...
I'll be your, whatever you want...
I'll give up, whatever you want...
I'll take in, whatever you want...
I'll do it, whenever you want...
I heard her say heresy,
but she says alot of things,
I heard him say misery,
But he pulls alot of strings...
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2005-12-19 13:27:15]
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Re: Dead Ends With Definitions
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by ruby_dreamer on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 01:57:43 PM AEST
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It sounds like this is supposed to have a rhythm of some sort, as the excessive commas confused me at first. Is this meant to be a song?
The word choice is excellent, and brings forth imagery well. Definitely thought-provoking. Splendid work! |
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Re: Dead Ends With Definitions
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 03:26:04 PM AEST
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A thought provoking piece of poetry penned so well. Captivating from start to finish. Well done. Thanks so much for sharing this great piece of poetry with us.
*hugs*
~sue~
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Re: Dead Ends With Definitions
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 06:34:36 PM AEST
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Nice word choices, indeed. The structure is a bit more like song lyrics than typical poetry, but no bad thing, that.
Keep it up.
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