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Needles
Contributed by
weepingprophet
on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 01:04:24 AM in AEST
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fragile, frozen
these fingers calloused
and so unaware
dig through the porcelain skin
of all empty promises
find the needle
stuck under the waste
of lies
and pull
tug gently on the end
cold steal under my skin
a quick jerk of honesty
and the needle is freed
loosened from the weight
of tales and exaggerations
find the needle
gently now
stumble for the truth
pull back.
at the sight of honesty
bloodied fingers
frail no more, fragilty
broken.
honestly the honesty waits
under the wieght of my skin
porcelain promises
empty.
waiting for the freed needle
to realize the lies
of calloused fingers
now aware.
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Re: Needles
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by crow6279 on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 03:02:02 AM AEST
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I find this one to describe how I sometimes feel...but wouldn't acknowledge anywhere but here.
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Re: Needles
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by Shmokin on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 07:34:11 AM AEST
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| Good read, :-) |
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Re: Needles
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by 8kiwi8 on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 07:37:24 PM AEST
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| im quite ashamed to say i dont understand entirely what its about...however that could also be a good thing that you used metaphoric language well?great either way! |
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Re: Needles
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 07:54:56 PM AEST
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Hey there... very incisive wording! Dealing a lot with
needles and its abusiveness... I wonder and hope
that you're not involving yourself with drug abuse?
The poem is well crafted as always, and with that
strikingly enigmatic style of yours.. that i'm quite
honestly envious of.
fragile, frozen
these fingers calloused
and so unaware
dig through the porcelain skin
of all empty promises
Heavy introspective material there..
keep it up
a fan always. |
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