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Beauty
Contributed by
unbreakable
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Saturday, 17th December 2005 @ 05:16:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Beauty's internal
in what we believe
it's best represented
in thoughts we conceive
Beauty I argue
is only skin deep
reflected in effort
put into upkeep
Beauty is kindness
the laughter we share
in opening our hearts
to show that we care
Beauty, I tell you
is not what one knows
but a thing to be measured
from your head to your toes
Beauty is love
everything we hold dear
it's seen in expression
in faith and in fear
Beauty, you know
is the shape that we take
judged by the impression
appearances make
Beauty's in everyone
in young and in old
a thing to be shared
in the hearts that we mold
Beauty, you lie
for it's not what we share
it's not in our hearts
but the skin that we bare!
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Re: Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by LostAmbition on
Sunday, 18th December 2005 @ 02:21:52 AM AEST (User
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LOL
this is really good
but just wonderin
why didnt ya put it
under the beauty topic?
instead of none?
i like this poem tho :D |
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Re: Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th December 2005 @ 03:34:54 PM AEST (User
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The two tones of voice in this work make the poem move forward, like watching a debate from the outside. I like how you emphasized the difference with italics... as for the words themselves, I think your choice was fantastic and something we should all take with us. |
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Re: Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by 8kiwi8 on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 09:13:38 AM AEST (User
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wow i really really really like this. i wrote a poem on beauty aswell , short but i wasn't very happy with the way i put it forward. i really like the way you set it out, sort of like a conversation? i really like it! well done x x x
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Re: Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Monday, 2nd January 2006 @ 04:49:51 PM AEST (User
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Well here's a post that I missed! Beauty's really so hard to put your finger on at times, and I liked the argument style this is written in. It's kind of funny which one gets the last word, it was an ending i enjoyed (to be honest I have no idea which side is right, as you'd usually find me somewhere in the middle of a conversation like this one, but anyways...). My favorite lines were probably the last ones, and those that made up the second stanza, as the rhymes there stand out to me for some reason--I guess it was because sounded good. All in all another great write. |
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Re: Beauty
(User Rating: 1 ) by outlaw_mutiny on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 11:31:28 PM AEST (User
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this is a good write your flow is awsome i like it |
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