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Await Our Fate
Contributed by
the_story_of_the_year
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Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 01:06:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You like short walks on the beach
I like long hikes on the moon
These city lights are watching us
And we watch them too
Now the breeze blows harder
We're lost, and we both know it
We squint our eyes harder
We're nervous, but we don't show it
Let's hold each other closer
At least we won't lose one other
We'll await our fate together
We'll take the hits, one after another
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Re: Await Our Fate
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 03:40:58 AM AEST
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I genuinely enjoyed this piece
The first two lines, I believe, expressed the main message or theme of the poem.
Common differences…perhaps superficial?
“These city lights are watching us
And we watch them too”
I liked these lines best.
They can be interpreted in so many ways.
Something so simple, can become something so complex.
I very much admire the structure, scheme and flow of this poem…it some how did not strain to rhyme.
*nods*
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Re: Await Our Fate
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by tiggytom on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 11:45:51 AM AEST
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I agree with Roman the first verse says it all for me. There is a nice effortless flow to this, well done.
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Re: Await Our Fate
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by Jessica_Saini on
Thursday, 15th December 2005 @ 12:36:24 AM AEST
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Beautiful poem... nice rhythm... nice rhyming... It is also somehow universal. People from diverse backgrounds can bring their own interpretations to it and relate to it in their own ways.
~Jessica |
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