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Freezin'
Contributed by
lifefliesby
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Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 10:03:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The cold, so crisp and bitter too
A sharpened pain to cut through you
It slits and stabs, it cuts right through
The toughest man, the toughest you
The thickest skin, the toughest hide
All break and split from side to side
No tip nor edge or surrated blade
Then how could you destroy whats made
Whats built so strong, with flesh and blood
Could all be cracked like hardend mud
How can you cut me so deep
With no real blade for you to sweep
Across my nerves, my veins, my heart
To make me drop and fall apart
My skin, now broke, and split apart
Exposing what I feel; my heart
Left out so cold, and bitter too
A sharpened pain to cut through you
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Re: Freezin'
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 10:11:25 PM AEST
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I really loved this poem...I loved the way it rhymed and it flowed very well! Keep it up!
-Jessie |
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Re: Freezin'
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 10:17:37 PM AEST
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| very nice!!! keep it up. |
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Re: Freezin'
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by liquidsunshine on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 10:40:38 PM AEST
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Your best flow so far, I think. Keep writing, you really do get better over time. I think it's the one thing we have left in common.
- just me |
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Re: Freezin'
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by OzChick on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 11:46:05 PM AEST
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One of the best poems I have read in a while.
I can feel the chill. Great write!
~Jenny~ |
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Re: Freezin'
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by Gothchyk on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 02:37:22 AM AEST
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| great job, you can feel the emotion put into it. |
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