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Wishful Beginning
Contributed by
Channing
on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 08:11:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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How do I get back to a time?
When you were so lovingly mine
Before the demon came
Thus putting us all to shame
How do I get back to where I was?
When everything was done in just cause
When you were pleasantly smiling
If only I hadn’t started riling
I wish to begin
When we had no pricks in our skin
Caused from a lethal needle
And from my insistent wheedle
I wish I could save you
For you showed me a hearts value
But the demon destroyed us
Leaving us in a state of callus
-Channing-
Copyright ©
Channing
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2005-12-12 20:11:10]
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Re: Wishful Beginning
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by justme03 on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 09:18:02 PM AEST
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| the rhythm seems a bit off to me but the idea and the wording are superb. lots o love, Kortnie |
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Re: Wishful Beginning
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 11:51:24 AM AEST
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Perhaps a tad rusty, but you still got your basic point across...I would've liked to have seen you expand on your thoughts a bit more. Nice job though...Another ugly reality for too many.
Scorp. |
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Re: Wishful Beginning
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by LostAmbition on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 02:15:21 PM AEST
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i can relate to this one
not personally
but family and freinds
hope this is in yer past
keep it up! |
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