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It's Done
Contributed by
chanceof_promise
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Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 04:55:48 PM in AEST
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Its done, Im over with now
All time spent is forever lost
No longer able to understand
What went so wrong
No one could ever comprehend
What we saw in each other,
What we tried to be
Its done, Im over with now
Theres no way that this was going to last
We will just be figures of each others past
Like a story book that ends to soon
Its done, Im over with now
Is this the way you wanted it to be?
Is this the way you wanted it to end?
Its done, Im over with now
Its over, what was spent is now lost
All went wrong, figures from our past
A story book with a big imagination
One that cant make it work
Its done, Im over with now but,
This just turned into my show
Soon you will know what its like
And you wont make it trough this
Its done, your over with now
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Re: It's Done
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by iodinelove on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 05:01:14 PM AEST
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You could spell through right ^_^ beyond that it's great....the repetition is nice...but it does begin to grow old....i would take the fifth stanza out...unless you feel its needed....
also you are is you're although some say your out of sheer laziness....so i dunno...anyway, keep writing ^_^ always, abraham |
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Re: It's Done
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by Jen54 on
Friday, 23rd December 2005 @ 05:28:15 PM AEST
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| It alright I didn't really like how you kept repeating that line but it works. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: It's Done
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 07:11:13 PM AEST
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| I like it , i don't think you need to change anything. Keep up the good work. |
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