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Untitled... still
Contributed by
xoXOSaDiEOXox
on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 09:16:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Silvery wings,
Tipped with stars,
Away from home,
They come from Mars.
Swiftly moving,
Through the tress,
Leaving trails,
Through the leaves.
Their pearly skin,
Reflects the light,
You’ll only see them,
In the night.
Gracefully skating,
Through the air,
Leaping and dancing,
They look for a lair.
Copyright ©
xoXOSaDiEOXox
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2005-12-11 09:16:22]
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Re: Untitled... still
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by The_Callif on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 11:52:24 AM AEST
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good poem
a wise man once told me 2 things
the first... a poem is like a child, it can't survive very long unnamed, so just name it whatever you feel right now, or why you wrote the poem
the second.... a rhyme scheme does make a poem sound cooler, but dont force it...
once again, great write, keep up the good work
-Callif |
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Re: Untitled... still
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by slogan on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 02:34:54 PM AEST
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| I agree with the above comments... very good advice... great write..jh |
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Re: Untitled... still
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by Ari on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 10:52:56 PM AEST
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| How about Wings and Stars?? |
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Re: Untitled... still
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 05:18:57 PM AEST
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| what about " Cosmic dancers" |
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