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Satisfaction for Sanity (untitled?)
Contributed by
soleil
on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 08:01:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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You’ll say to yourself, “Man, she’s diggin’ me,” and I’ll say to myself, "****, I think he knows!”
Well we’ll just see what happens, we’ll see how this goes,
but for now, I’m tired, and that goes to show
how drowning a situation like ours can be.
And I hope that in the future, you’ll smile when you think of me.
‘Cause I don’t want to be a number on your list
of the girls that make you think, “What if?” “What if…”
So I suggested we stop this all together, and you replied with,
"I’d hate to compromise such satisfaction for mere sanity."
The world is in spirals and we’ve lost all vanity.
Copyright ©
soleil
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2005-12-09 20:01:50]
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Re: Satisfaction for Sanity (untitled?)
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by DesolantDreamer on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 08:10:43 PM AEST
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| I'm a simple girl in Japan and my comment may not be too helpful, but: If i could understand some of those big words I bet it would be a great poem! ^-^ gomen, I tried! |
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Re: Satisfaction for Sanity (untitled?)
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by trini on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 11:50:36 PM AEST
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for being fairly new, i think you did a pretty good job. but dont get stuck on trying to rhyme, poems dont need to rhyme to sound good, just let it flow this seems just a little choppy. overall a good write. keep up the good work
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